The extended family(grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Family, and relatives are an important part of our life, and even if we do not like some of them still they are connected with us by blood. Personally, I believe that the notion of the family is being tighter and more tighter day by day , so cousins now are less closer than they were a few decades ago.
I feel this way for two reasons,which I will explore in the subsequent essay.
First of all, people now a days are more independent from the family, because they are more related to the general society, and spend more time with friends than family. Now, when the children become eighteen years old they earn a terrible freedom. Some of them start to live by themselves, and this means less contact with the family members, so when they will create their own families It is not going to be a strong bond between them and
My personal experience is a compelling example of this. My father has 3 uncles and each of them 6 kids, and they used to live together with grandparents in a big house. All the kids grew up together and all loved each other as siblings. when my grandfather passed away it was a big lose for the family, especially for his kids, my father, uncles and aunts, but, they recuperated them selves in a short time because their grandparents and uncles were there for them, and took care for them as they were their kids. Today, after 45 years my father respects and loves his uncles and his cousins as brothers and sisters. Moreover even me and my siblings love them the same way, I can not separate them from my real uncles, because for me they are the same, but now It is hard to find that relation, because people do not live together and do not spend time with each other.
Secondly, people work for long hours and many days , so they do not have time to see each other, and the days off they spend just to rest.
For instance, when I was a kid I used to visit my aunt almost every day and playing with my four cousins, but that lasted until we grew up, because than everything changed. I started university, the other cousin got married, one immigrated to another state, and the other one started to work. Thus, we almost never had the chance to spend long time together. everyone started her own life and the bond started to fade away.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that the raports with relatives have changed a lot compared to the past. This because people are more independent now and spend more time with friends than family,
, and because they are more busy now, they work for long hours, thus they do not have time to visit their aunts, uncles and grandparents, moreover sometimes they even do not find time for their siblings and parents too.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 214, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'tighter' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: tighter
...tion of the family is being tighter and more tighter day by day , so cousins now are less cl...
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Line 1, column 237, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...eing tighter and more tighter day by day , so cousins now are less closer than the...
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Line 1, column 259, Rule ID: LESS_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Non-standard use of the comparative or superlative. Did you mean 'less close'?
Suggestion: less close
...tighter day by day , so cousins now are less closer than they were a few decades ago. I f...
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Line 3, column 32, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
...s ago. I feel this way for two reasons,which I will explore in the subsequent essay....
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Line 7, column 22, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...equent essay. First of all, people now a days are more independent from the family, b...
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Line 7, column 26, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...nt essay. First of all, people now a days are more independent from the family, b...
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Line 7, column 230, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'terrible freedom'.
Suggestion: terrible freedom
...ren become eighteen years old they earn a terrible freedom. Some of them start to live by themselv...
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Line 9, column 238, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
...r and all loved each other as siblings. when my grandfather passed away it was a big...
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Line 9, column 380, Rule ID: THEM_SELVES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'themselves'?
Suggestion: themselves
...uncles and aunts, but, they recuperated them selves in a short time because their grandpare...
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Line 9, column 618, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...nd his cousins as brothers and sisters. Moreover even me and my siblings love them the s...
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Line 13, column 51, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...people work for long hours and many days , so they do not have time to see each ot...
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Line 15, column 360, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Everyone
...the chance to spend long time together. everyone started her own life and the bond start...
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Line 21, column 1, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...d more time with friends than family, , and because they are more busy now, the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, thus, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2207.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45858585859 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27624148587 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460606060606 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.3143412638 48.9658058833 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.611111111 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.53405017921 176% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148310482742 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0430226302689 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405044168889 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0665181225995 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437583514576 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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