The extended family is not important now than it was in the past
Having a great relationship with different people would be very beneficial for any persons life. The famaily relationship as well as friendship play a crucial role in each persons career. People Always try to enhance and develope their social network to ease their life, benefit from others opinion and take advatages of their experinece. Nowadays, by this rapid and unstoppable changes in world we live, like fast rate of life, population growth, improvement of technology, competitive atmosphere in work place, etc, some people think that having extended family is less important these days. In my prespective, I almost believe that the importance of having extended family is decreased these days. Following reseons and example will elaborate on my opinion.
First of all, in the contrast of the past, all members of each family did not live together in the same place or the same town necessarily. This distance results in decreasing the influence and effect of other family members on each other's life. Therefore, for the people in a society who are far from their family- which are not a few these days- seeking to extend their friendship and looking to find new people to fill and replace their family positions. For instance, When I was 7 years old, we migrated from a west town to the capital city of my country. All of my family lived in the town and when we migrated, we had to find new people and friends to compensate for the initial social needs.
Second, it is needless to say that by growing the population and rapid rate of life, People are too busy these days and it did not expect them to give a lot of time for other members of the family. They just care about their wives and children. Further, the aim of extending of family would be the advantages which will be achieved for example, helping in rising children, using the experience, etc. So, if they are too busy to help, it would not be very important that someone had a vast and great family or not.
To summarize the points and reasons, I belive that extended family is less important now than it was in the past, due to the far distance between each family member and the busy life each member of the family would has.
- people spent time to much on more enjoyable-doing things than the things they should have done 71
- Students are more influenced by their teacher than their students 73
- it is better to have broad knowledge in many academic subjects than to specialize in one subject 80
- People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries 76
- Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 84, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...people would be very beneficial for any persons life. The famaily relationship as well ...
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Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
... effect of other family members on each others life. Therefore, for the people in a so...
^^^^^^
Line 13, column 216, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...sy life each member of the family would has.
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Line 13, column 221, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fe each member of the family would has.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, second, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1825.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7157622739 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48700191159 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503875968992 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.037131546 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0625 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1875 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0625 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275282237017 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0834606231399 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111840915255 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202224806158 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1457966237 0.0645574589148 226% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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