getting advice from friends who are older than you is more valuable than getting that from your peers
Human beings have always been subjected to different communications and advices. Due to its paramount importance in our daily life, a heated debate exists over whether what is the best source for taking valuable recommendations. While some people believe that people who have the same age like us present advices effectively, some others, including me, have an opposite viewpoint. Regarding this point, I strongly believe that older people than us will give advices better than our peers. Not only they have a lot of experience, but also it is less likely that they can be considered as our rivals in different circumstances. In what follows, I will scrutinize the most outstanding reasons.
The first aspect to point out is that, the more years living in the world, the more valuable experiences will be obtainable for people. There is no doubt that, people confront with different conditions during their lifetime. Hence, each of them brings them invaluable experiences that can have profound effects on others. I mean, when a person presents his advices on a specific issue to others, in fact, he or she paves the way for them in order to prevent making probable mistakes. Let's consider a climbing leader who has been in different climate conditions during his previous activities. Needless to say when he gives practical advices about needed equipment in heavy snowy climates, the conditions will be safer for people who wants to follow this way. Meanwhile, people who have the same age to us cannot pinpoint all the details because of lacking enough experience.
A further more significant point is that, older people often are not our rivals. They passed the stages that we deal with them. Therefore, there is not often any benefits for them to repudiates giving invaluable advices. Consequently, their advices will be more reliable. For instance, I had been working for three years as a designer before I entered the art school. My close friend as a classmate has always been sensitive to my works. In fact, he was my main rival while we had a friendly relationship. I stopped paying attention to his advices when I recognized his hidden competition. In fact, what he gave to me, as recommendations were misleading. As a result, I met critical challenges with his advices. After that, I decided to just pay attention to my teacher as a reliable source.
In brief, by taking into account all the aforementioned reasons, it seems that getting advices from people who are older than us is a rational strategy to be successful in the upcoming events throughout the lifetime.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, regarding, so, therefore, while, for instance, i mean, in brief, in fact, no doubt, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2152.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99303944316 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83282026736 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552204176334 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3492442494 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.08 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.24 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171903548445 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.040374018123 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625338151623 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126429127701 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0833369251322 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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