Do you agree or disagree?
Some people take the view that older children can take care of younger children, some others may hold the view that taking care of children should be done by other adults.
One of the main concerns among families is about the process of taking care of the younger children. Due to its paramount importance on the children's lives, a long controversy exists over whether who can do this critical task well. While some people believe that older children can do it effectively, others including me have an opposite viewpoint. In this regard, I firmly believe that adults like parents are the better choice for taking care of the young children. Not only have they remarkable experiences, but also adults are responsible for their behaviors about the children. I will scrutinize the most significant reasons in order to clarify the issue.
First, adults have invaluable experiences than the older children. There is no doubt that, training and paying attention to young children should be done by people who have enough knowledge and experience in this regard. Since, adults may have similar experiences in different circumstances, they can be considered as trustful ones to do this significant task. For instance, when I was a child, I confronted with a serious disease. My older sister did not know what she should do when my hearts bits too fast while I was crying painfully. When my mother observed the extant condition, she immediately pushed my hands up. However, I felt pain on my heart; this action decreased the related side effects on my hearts. That is why her valuable experience helped me to have a better condition. Meanwhile, my sister could not do anything for me at that moment.
Second, adults are responsible for their duties. According to the current rules of the governments, adults should explain the different circumstances related to their children. Therefore, if a child confronts with a serious problem, the adults should pay attention to release him or her from the difficult conditions. Based on my own personal experience, I was convicted by the government about my son. I left him with his older brother for a week. When I came back, I observed that his finger has been cut. My wife went to police station and she stated that it was my fault to ignore the take caring process. In fact, this undesirable experience has been so far, the worst one I have ever had during my lifetime.
In brief, by taking into account all the aforementioned reasons, it seems that taking care of younger children by adults is more rational. This claim is based on two chief reasons. First, the ability of adults based on their valuable experiences. Second, the adult's responsibility about the children. That is why it is highly recommended for families to take special attention about their young children.
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...their valuable experiences. Second, the adults responsibility about the children. That...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in brief, in fact, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2207.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98194130926 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78293227998 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528216704289 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.6890182485 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.8214285714 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8214285714 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.03571428571 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265958578818 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722464165979 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0842976116135 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186288419375 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100712645866 0.0645574589148 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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