Government should spend more money in support of arts than in support of atheletics-such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
In university, there are vivid activites which are present.Among them the two important and poles apart activites are arts and sports.The common problem that most of university are facing today are regarding which activites should be given more preference.I agree with that more money should be spent in support of the arts rather than in support of atheletic such as state- sponosered olympic games.I feel this way for two reason, which i will explore in this essay.
To begin with, every student present in the university are all not interested in sports. There are number of students who are passionate as well as excellent in arts. But due to fewer opprtunites they does not get chance to showcase their talent. So, because of this it becomes very important that university support and encourage their students by giving different oppurtunites. This should not only be at university level but also state level.For example, my brother is studying arts in newyork. Their department was having very bad condition.As the council were more focus on sports and other activites.He was so much dicourged and disappointed that he discontinue the field after one year, also change the field and college.This cost lot of money and time.
Secondly, the fact that university is highly focusing only on sport and atheletic activites, students tend to decide their feild according to this basis. This has lead to tremendous decrease of artist from past years. Students who are excellent at art are force to choose some other activites which they don't like much. For instance, my colleague is amazing belle dancer and even she wanted to pursue it as profession but because of lack of oppurtunites and encourgement which she has seen during her bacholar in her university, has lead to chose her engineering.
Artist are the greatest treasure of world. They should be highly encourged. Because of above given reason i agree that university should spent more money on arts rather than atheletic activites.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, for example, for instance, i feel, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1673.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 327.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11620795107 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70910387348 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559633027523 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 111.153345998 48.9658058833 227% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 119.5 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3571428571 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78571428571 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224947672108 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060835261142 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.087948159561 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153483656076 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101431582033 0.0645574589148 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 10.002688172 205% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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