If the government wants to invest in the following three area, what do you think is the most worthwhile?
1- Land exploration
2- Education
3- Health care
Policies, governments adopt to assign financial credit to different parts of infrastructures, vary from country to country. In this regard, three major parts that may require investing money in the most are education, health care, and land exploration. While education and land exploration have been receiving enough attention in the past few decades, improving the healthcare system has been an ongoing issue recently insomuch as the plan political parties provide in presidency elections plays a crucial role in the result of the election. I personally subscribe to the view that it is more beneficial to allocate finance to health care. I cling to this standpoint for two main reasons, which I will elucidate in the following essay.
To begin with, an undeniable fact is financial issues are barriers for many people to receive an effective treatment. In this situation, governments can alleviate the situation by investing money, developing some strategies in order that the medical expenses may be affordable for a higher percentage of people. For instance, changing the health insurance policies so that it can cover the greater part of medical expenses. Another example is to consider exceptional policies for people, who suffer from diseases that demand so much finance such as cancers that the patient need to do chemotherapy and buy medicine at a high price. Thus, designing and developing some plans to improve healthcare system demand so much investment, and the government should place a premium on it.
The second reason that deserves some words is that in the modern era, despite the spectacular progress in medical science, there are still some diseases and infectious that threaten people’s lives and require wide investigations, experiments to discover the right cure. For instance, MS, which has become very popular especially among women in the past few years, stems from some intellectual problems and causes people unable to move in the end. The point is scientists have not discovered any cure for this disease yet. Thus, if the government spend more money in the field of not cured diseases and infectious, many people can live a healthier life. After all, the healthier lives people enjoy, the happier country we will have.
To put all into a nutshell, considering all the aforementioned reasons, I firmly support the idea of allocating money to health care since not only does it make it affordable for many people to get effective treatment, but it also results in discover cures for some dangerous disease that threaten many people’s lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, so, still, thus, while, after all, for instance, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2174.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25120772947 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86472615293 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579710144928 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.8147712688 48.9658058833 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.875 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.875 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106813219489 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0396065711801 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553386545768 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0684725685256 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596099615388 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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