If the government wants to invest in the following three areas, what do you think is the most worthwhile?
• Land exploration
• Education
• Health care
There is no doubts that nowadays, education plays the key role in people's lives. No one can deny the direct and indirect effects of education. It is a no-brainer that well education can guide individuals to the prosperity and success. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that the government should invest more money in the education. However, some others may take the opposite viewpoint and believe that other areas such as health care or land exploration should be more invested. From my own perspective, the first belief is true. I hold this because of two reasons that I will explore in the following essay.
The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that well education affects directly or indirectly to other areas such as health care. It goes without saying that to have an acceptable health care, we should have educated doctors, as well as, sophisticated facilities to care diseases successfully and elevate the health level in the society. All of these are impossible without a comprehensive education, so to have a progress in all areas, we should first have a sophisticate education system. To shed light on this issue, sociologists claim that the most key factor of development and progress in the South Korea is acceptable education system. They believe that this system helps South Korea to have a sweep changes in other areas such as well-being, business, health care and so on, over the course of time.
Another equally noteworthy point supporting this opinion is that good education system increases public's general knowledge, which leads that they oversee more on the government. To have a responsive government, members of society should have knowledge about their rights. People who are illiterate or unaware are more susceptible to have a tyrant government. As a case in point, what makes the South Korea democratic and North Korea dictatorship is nothing but their people's knowledge about their rights. Had North Korea had good education system, the government would not have become tyrant.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'There are no doubts'?
Suggestion: There are no doubts
There is no doubts that nowadays, education plays the key ...
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Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind substantiating'.
Suggestion: mind substantiating
...ng essay. The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Line 3, column 461, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'progress'.
Suggestion: progress
...t a comprehensive education, so to have a progress in all areas, we should first have a so...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, may, so, well, no doubt, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1740.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14792899408 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76563135317 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3988094901 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.352941176 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8823529412 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82352941176 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186073603673 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562984536674 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046534531116 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121087484467 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529351386017 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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