Which one do you think is the most important factor for a student to succeed at college or university?
1. Tutors in university.
2. The encouragement from family and friends.
3. High-quality education from high school.
There is no doubt that nowadays universities play a key role in people's lives. No one can deny the direct and indirect effects of universities. It is a no-brainer that a qualified university can help students climb the ladder of success and become prosperous in their future professional lives. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that encouragements from family and friends are a key factor for a person to succeed at university. Some others, however, may take the opposite viewpoint and believe that other factors such as acceptable education in high school or tutors in the university are more important. From my own perspective, the first belief is true. I hold this because of two reasons that I will explore in the following essay.
The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that encouragement by significant others can motivate a person especially when there are myriads of difficulties. It goes without saying that every person needs social supports and students are not the exception to the fact. We are social animals, so a basic motivator for every person is individuals around him. This can be too momentous when something bad is about to happen or when a person gets disappointed. In this situation, he needs a person to calm him and instigate him, give him a hope to continue and do not give up. Needless to say, the university has a lot of challenges and stressful situations, which person have to face and cope with them, so to become prosperous, he needs social supports a lot. To shed light on this issue, when I was in university, my thesis that did not go on well. I lost my hope and even decided to quit the university, but my close friend encouraged me to continue. His motivations instigated me to go ahead and after two years, my thesis got ready and I passed my thesis with a great grade. Had my friend not incentivized me, I would not have become successful in my thesis.
Another equally noteworthy point supporting this opinion is that encouragement boosts self-efficacy. As Albert Bandura-one of most well-known psychologists of the world- asserts, verbal encouragement can increase persons' self-confidence and self-efficacy. Needless to say, to become successful we need to become a confidant person. With a low self-efficacy, human doubts about his talents. He thinks that he cannot do university assignments appropriate, so he cannot progress. Even if he has a talent in that major, because he has a negative self-appraisal, he will not become successful. Significant others give a person an assertiveness to advance, so I think without these social supports and encouragement, students will never succeed.
To make a long story short, all the aforementioned above lead us to the conclusion that encouragement by significant others has a lot of benefits that outweigh the benefits of other factors, due to the fact that these motivations can instigate students and elevate their self-efficacy. It is recommended that to foster a prosperous person, parents encourage their children from their infancy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind substantiating'.
Suggestion: mind substantiating
...ng essay. The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, well, i think, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2590.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 511.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06849315068 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15426496172 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516634050881 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 827.1 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3618817744 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6153846154 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6538461538 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.53846153846 5.45110844103 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190290497652 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491441733277 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588364331466 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122982064409 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0960374583412 0.0645574589148 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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