If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. 27
Over the past few years, the issue of whether or not job seekers ought to select a job that has security, immediately or waiting for finding more satisfying jobs has received a great deal of attention from young adults and graduated students. Although some may say that waiting for finding a job that workers have a pleasurable feel and a good salary is the best choice; I, as well as many others, believe that due to the current situation in the society, people should not lose any chances for having a job, and they will have opportunities to enhance their job in future.
First of all, an important reason why choosing a secure job is the best option is that demand for job is gradually increasing today. In the modern era, the number of educated people is increasing compared to the past, and besides of increasing educated people; also, demand for a job is enhanced. As a result, if a job seeker finds a secure career, they would select it because opportunities for finding jobs are decreased. Furthermore, in the future, if he or she will not satisfying with his jobs, he may change his or her work.
Another reason for this point of view is that because of high technology, competition for finding a job is increased. Many experts believe that most scientists try to building some robots for holding many works. So, robots will be replacing the labor force in the future. In this situation, if a young people find a secure job, he or she must select the job. Furthermore, in many developing countries the population is expanding at a fast rate, and in the developed ones, migration is affecting the population. With respect to these sophisticated conditions, finding a job has become a competitive procedure, and it is not easy to have a job. Thus people should not lose the chance of having a secure job easily.
Finally, it is occasionally said that people must take the opportunity for having a secure job because there are not any satisfying jobs in the society, and people should build their own favorable job. Many company managers say that the definition of a satisfying job may vary a lot among a group of job candidates. For example, for some people, income is the most important aspect of their job, and they would work under any condition just for having a high salary. On the other hand, some other aspects like working hours, health insurance and working conditions may be more important for some other job candidates. Therefore, there is not a wildly accepted satisfying job available, and people should take a secure job and try to make it how they want it to be.
In conclusion, considering the ideas presented in the paragraphs above, I personally believe that if a person has the chance to get a secure job, he or she should take it without any doubts chiefly due to hard condition for finding a job and the opportunities for promotions in ever.
- One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part time job 70
- It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents job 73
- It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours 71
- Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to sch 70
- TOEFL TPO 34 - Integrated Writing Task 60
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 39, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
Over the past few years, the issue of whether or not job seekers ought to select a job that ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 564, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...have opportunities to enhance their job in future. First of all, an important reason...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 475, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'satisfy'
Suggestion: satisfy
...e, in the future, if he or she will not satisfying with his jobs, he may change his or her...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 645, Rule ID: WILDLY_ACCEPTED[1]
Message: Did you mean 'widely'?
Suggestion: widely
...b candidates. Therefore, there is not a wildly accepted satisfying job available, and ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, first of all, with respect to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2386.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 505.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72475247525 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71132137557 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443564356436 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 761.4 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.5111552475 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.578947368 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5789473684 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.52631578947 5.45110844103 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.487461877389 0.236089414692 206% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177678694879 0.076458572812 232% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111360063063 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.309188685328 0.150856017488 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.077156177223 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 10.002688172 275% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 39, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
Over the past few years, the issue of whether or not job seekers ought to select a job that ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 564, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...have opportunities to enhance their job in future. First of all, an important reason...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 475, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'satisfy'
Suggestion: satisfy
...e, in the future, if he or she will not satisfying with his jobs, he may change his or her...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 645, Rule ID: WILDLY_ACCEPTED[1]
Message: Did you mean 'widely'?
Suggestion: widely
...b candidates. Therefore, there is not a wildly accepted satisfying job available, and ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, first of all, with respect to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2386.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 505.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72475247525 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71132137557 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443564356436 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 761.4 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.5111552475 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.578947368 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5789473684 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.52631578947 5.45110844103 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.487461877389 0.236089414692 206% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177678694879 0.076458572812 232% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111360063063 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.309188685328 0.150856017488 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.077156177223 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 10.002688172 275% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.