If there’s a way to improve yourself, which one among the three choices you would take?
۱٫ take more exercise
۲٫ eat healthy food
۳٫ reduce the amount of stress
Since the beginning, people have been trying to improve their lives by modifying their lifestyle. Nowadays, people wonder whether it would be better if they change their lifestyle to do some exercise or eat healthier foods, or look for some ways to decrease the amount of their stress. In my opinion, reducing the amount of stress would be a better choice because without stress any activity would be more fun. Moreover, you can do any task better, if you have no stress. I will illustrate my reasons in the following paragraphs.
First, without stress, any activity would be more fun. In other words, if you have stress, any activity includes exercising and eating healthy food would not make you happy as much as you want. For example, last year I had a car accident and consequently, I had some financial problems that led me to have a lot of stress in that period. Actually, my stress remained even when my financial problem got finished. Although my family and friends did a lot of things for me to make me happy, my mind was full of stress until someone introduced a good psychologist to me. After a couple of weeks, he trained me how to control my stress better. As a result, I could experience happiness again.
Second, you can do any task better with a free mind. For sure, when you have stress your mind can not focus on tasks with all of it’s potential. Thus, you may not able to do even some simple tasks that in the past, you could do them well. For instance, when I was a student at university, I had a lot of stress about finishing the project on time when I was doing my master's degree project. Thus, I must have done any easy task several times to finally do it successfully. Indeed, stress led me to waste my time even more. Once, when I saw one of my supervisors, he talked with me about the project staff and told me that “don’t have any stress for finishing the project on time I wrote a letter to the department for allocating some extra time to you and they accept it. Hence, you would have enough time for doing a good project”. Therefore, that helped me to get rid of the stress that let me decrease the number of my mistakes during doing my project. Eventually, I finished my project as well as I could.
Based on the aforementioned reasons, it can be concluded that stress plays an important role in human life and it would be more beneficial if people could reduce the amount of their stress.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, consequently, finally, first, hence, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, even so, for example, for instance, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2003.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51126126126 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58415300741 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477477477477 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5184452233 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0869565217 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3043478261 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5652173913 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2040985982 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683550502747 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660243662421 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147062667217 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389319122165 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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