If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what wouldyou change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
In this our modern era, it goes without saying that choosing a creare is one of the most indispensable things making today's generation minds busy. it sparks a controversy among critics wheater it will be a good choice to have a same job like parents or not.Some of the critics hold the the opinion that having this similarity could be effective to make children to a successful person.On the other hand, others stand at the other side of the continuum, believing that it is a disaster to have a same job for children as their parents.they say that not only does it make them dependant to their kind parents but they also do not have the chance for huge risks out of their parents' control.Personally speaking, I believe that similar job is the key of successfulness as the first group opinion.The reasons to substantiate my point of view will be ellaborated upon here under.
To begin with, I am of the opinion that similare jobs provide the chance of engaging greate and useful helps and experiences. during the life, always parents have been chlidren's kind supporter and they give them their valuable knowledge in every moment of time as a free gift. it is crystal clear that their suggestions were one of the most essential builing blocks in child's life.this matter is true in job selection as well. parents have experience and even good friends that can help the children easily in any problem happening for them related to their job. it saves their time to not try different way of getting advantage in their creare due parent's recommandation.
Furthurmore, related background in human acts a vital role to have a good disipline in the desired future job and sequently the chance of successfullness will increase.To put in other words, the more a person has a prepared mind the more focuse on related tasks. children are under the supervision of their parents during their childhood. they are both curious and good observer of every thing related to their parents specially their creare that they spend a lot of their time and energy on. A recent research has shown that a great number of famouse doctors have had doctors parents. Not only does the initial knowledge of discutions occuring in the everydays family time make the children willing to this major from their childhood - even sometimes due to orientation characteristics-, but the parents also effort to make children familiar with this major in purpose.In fact, this deniable effect from parents directs children to a successfulness in their future job.
In conclusion, on the basis of afformentioned grounds and examples, I do believe that having a similare job for children as their parents is better rather than any other things. Not only do children have a background in this fields to be more familar, but their parents' support make them one step forwarder that others as well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, well, even so, in conclusion, in fact, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2381.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90927835052 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79694045639 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486597938144 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 733.5 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 163.220537548 48.9658058833 333% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 170.071428571 100.406767564 169% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.6428571429 20.6045352989 168% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07142857143 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.031352992392 0.236089414692 13% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0156626338607 0.076458572812 20% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0181456207932 0.0737576698707 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0249629277471 0.150856017488 17% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0103068709309 0.0645574589148 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 11.7677419355 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 10.002688172 275% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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