If you could go back to some time and place in the past when and where would you go Why

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If you could go back to some time and place in the past, when and where would you go? Why?

If I have a chance to go back in my life, I would say that I choose to live again the good times that I had with my family at Disneyworld. In 2019, me and my wife had an opportunity to visit the Disney’s parks with our son. That trip showed us how good is to be with each other. Enjoying every moment, our family have the best feelings together.
Firstly, since I was a child, I did not have a chance to visit Disneyworld. So, even if I was 39 years old, I was curious to know how magic it would be. And for sure, all people that work at these parks know how to make the best time that anyone can have. Making us feel as children again, all the entertainment can rescue the best memories from our childhood.
Secondly, as an adult, I could pay attention at Disney’s business. Despite the magic that is all time in the air, there is a big company behind everything. Making billions every year, this kind of market uses our feelings and memories to be maintained as an agressive source of money. Consequently, every place we went, we had a chance to buy a souvenir.
Thirdly, that vacation showed me that all my efforts to save money were the best choice. Seeing my son looking at everything with a smile on his face was really good. Until today, if I ask him where he wants to go on our family’s next trip, he will say Disneyworld. So, all days that I woke up very early in the morning, were paid with those 15 days that I could give him the pleasure to be there.
To conclude, absolutely if I have a chance, I go back to 2019 at Disneyworld. That family trip gave us the best time that we had in our lives. By making our love stronger, this vacation is still very clear in our minds.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1368.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.1963190184 4.8611393121 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42834764702 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518404907975 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.196737759 48.9658058833 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.0 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1578947368 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26315789474 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103733907583 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0330637983295 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450365176382 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0622661880799 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0208944903818 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 58.1214874552 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.78 10.9000537634 62% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.47 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 86.8835125448 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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