If you want to recommend a way to reduce living expenses for your friend, which of the following will you choose? Why?
1. Find a roommate to share a room
2. Do not buy the latest mobile phone, Buy new technological devices less frequently
3. Buy cheap foods and cook home (do not often eat outside)
Today due to the economy pressures, people deal with this think that how reduce and manage their expenses. Each people follow different strategies to reduce or eliminate some expenses. Somebody avoid buying updated technological devices and somebody prefer to cook home with cheap material to control their expenses. However, in my opinion find a person to share living place may help people to decrease their living expenses. The ensuing paragraphs explain my reasons for this notion.
First of all, sharing room with a roommate would lead to reduce the living pay and consequently save more money. Put it in other words, in my country, the money that is paid for renting a room or flat consist a half of people revenue. Thus, by having a roommate people could share the house renting money and in this way they might reduce their expenses. As an illustration, when I started my first job as an engineer in a town far from my hometown, I rented a small flat near my work place and I had to pay a noticeable proportion of my salary for it. I worked hard every day but at the end of the month I hadn’t save any money. So, I decided to share my flat to one of my collueges. In this fashion, I could save half of the money which I had paid for the living place. That’s way I believe in this way.
Second, having a roommate make an opportunity to have and use the facilities that you cannot afford them so it helps to manage and reduce your expenses. An example can drive this notion home. If our roommate has an oven, which we cannot afford, we can use it without put money to buy our own oven. Therefore, living with a roommate may remove people’s need to afford some living facilities.
In summary, people could control and reduce their expenses via sharing their room with a roommate. Thus, if a friends of mine need an advice to reduce his/her living expenses, I will suggest finding a roommate to share his/her house. This is because, not only he could share the cost of room, but also could save more money by using some his roommate’s staff that he hasn’t.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: EACH_EVERY_NNS[1]
Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
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Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'Somebody' must be used with a third-person verb: 'avoids'.
Suggestion: avoids
...ce or eliminate some expenses. Somebody avoid buying updated technological devices an...
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Line 1, column 251, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'somebody' must be used with a third-person verb: 'prefers'.
Suggestion: prefers
...ated technological devices and somebody prefer to cook home with cheap material to con...
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Line 4, column 108, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a friend' or simply 'friends'?
Suggestion: a friend; friends
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Line 4, column 131, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'advice'.
Suggestion: advice
...ommate. Thus, if a friends of mine need an advice to reduce his/her living expenses, I wi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, in summary, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 15.1003584229 13% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59090909091 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53831205934 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505347593583 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9143611023 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.85 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182649240109 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583126016004 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381389118898 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11408069638 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0168876912209 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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