Imagine that you are considering taking action to improve your performance in order to get better grades (marks) at school or to get a promotion and higher pay at work. You are
considering the following two actions:
A. Doing additional work or extra assignments beyond what is required;
B. Participating more actively and contributing your own ideas more frequently in group discussions;
Which one of these two actions do you think would be more helpful for improving your performance? Why?
Commonly, people take various actions to make teachers or leaders have a good impression on them and get favorable feedback. In my opinion, I believe participating actively and contributing ideas frequently in group discussions is an effective way to get promotions and good grades. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
For starters, we can exercise our capabilities of thinking critically, questioning concepts, and exploring new ideas by actively participating in group discussions, which can provide us a solid competitive edge over those who follow others passively. People who find it easy to come up with novel ideas are more creative, and thus more likely to be recognized by leaders. My own experience is a compelling model of that. I took a course called Introduction to contemporary literature as a sophomore. During a group discussion on the political view of an author called Zhou Zuoren, all students else expressed that they agreed with the author. However, I questioned his opinions on gender, revolution, and nation. I articulated my idea by using some detailed examples and quotations. As a result, the professor praised me for my critical thinking and gave me an A grade at the end of that semester. This example shows that teachers appreciate students with courage and motivation to express opinions.
Besides, active participation in group discussions shows a person’s enthusiasm about studying, which is encouraged in school and at work. An employee willing to participate in group discussions on projects must has made full preparations before the meeting. Take my previous colleague, Julie, as an example. She tended to read all related documents carefully every time before a group discussion started so that she could have a deep understanding of the topic and confidently challenge others’ thoughts during the discussion. Therefore, She obtained more professional skills and superior ability than those remiss colleagues. Finally, the leader recognized her potential and promoted her to a manager position.
Admittedly, doing extra work can reveal my diligence. However, it can not improve my quality if most of the work is repeated or tedious. In this condition, doing extra work is nothing but a waste of time.
Based on the reasons stated above, I assume participating actively and contributing ideas frequently in group discussions can improve my performance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'an' or 'A' is left.
Suggestion: an; A
...me for my critical thinking and gave me an A grade at the end of that semester. This...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, however, if, so, therefore, thus, i feel, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37402597403 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13868350116 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605194805195 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.0072916518 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0454545455 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13636363636 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118023723579 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.035801201566 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450595454497 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0746151546553 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541288426943 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.69 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.