Imagine that you plan to donate money to charity to help people in need. If you could give money to only one type of charitable organization, which one of the following would you choose and why?
An organization that provides food and housing to people in need
And organization that gives people money to start their own small business
And organization that provides medical care to people in need
Donating money to improve the quality of poor people’s lives would be a direct way to have a contribution to reduce the poverty in a society. Different people donate money with different aims for instance, providing food, medical care, housing, education, life facilities, job, and that sort of things. In my opinion, if I want to help charities, I prefer to devote my money to help poor people to start their own business. The ensuing paragraphs explain my reasons for this position.
First of all, providing opportunity for poor people to open up their own job not only helps them to have a better lives, but also has a positive impact on a society. Put it in other words, some indirect jobs would be made by supporting people in need to start a new business. On example can drive this notion home. Imagine a poor rural man that a charitable organization gave him a money to buy a small farmland and cultivate cotton. It is clear that the man need some workers helping him so, he can use his family members and also hire some workers. Moreover, he need hire a driver to take his crops to cities and sell them to factories which need cotton to produce cloths. Thus, in this way the poor man not only can provides his and his family’s needs, but also can help other people to have job. That’s why I think in this way.
Secondly, I believe helping to charitable organizations which make chance for poor ones to have their own job, is one help for whole their lives. To be specific, people who rely on charities for their food, medical care and so on, are so vulnerable and need long run support. This is because, if the charity alter its policies and decided to spend money on the other issues such as addict people of child labors, those poor people will get into serious troubles. On the other hand, people who received money from charities to open up a new job, will experience a self-sufficient and financially independent lives in their near future. Therefore, the charities could move to the other poor individuals and give them a hand with help.
In conclusion, if I want to opt one philenthrapic activity and give money to charities dealing with the issue, I will choose helping to provide job opportunities for people in need. That is because this is one time help for their whole lives and besides, although in this way we help a poor individual, other people could take advantage of this kind of help.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, of course, sort of, such as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1797.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83064516129 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71170745556 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475806451613 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9153245583 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.8 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4666666667 5.45110844103 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245423504668 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105964819187 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062474717032 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179272710178 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0225752500053 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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