Imagine that you plan to donate money to charity to help people in need If you could give money to only one type of charitable organization which one of the following would you choose and why An organization that provides food and housing to people i

There are too many children who suffer from cancer around the word, they are vulnerable and weak and expenses of their treatments are much more than older people. If I could help an organization, I would choose Children Cancer Research Center. By helping this organization I can help the most vulnerable people, because its researches can led to discover new ways of treatments and produce new drugs for children. They also provide free treatments for children therefore they make it easier for parents to deal with heavy expenses of cancer. I explain the reasons in following paragraphs.

First of all, One of the worst side effects of today cancer drugs is losing hair, and its unpleasant side effect that can have heavy effect on children mentally and physically. This center does research for discovering new ways of treatments and produce new drugs for children. Scientists are hoping to find new ways of treatment for cancer, if they find new ways and new drugs, it can lead to chipper and more effective drugs with fewer side effects.

Another reason is treatments expenses. Parents of children how have cancer are usually busy, they should always stay at hospital and help their children, so they don't have enough time to make money. I have seen a lot of these parents how have this problem. This organization send nurses to help parents or give parents money to work less and have enough time to spend with their child.

And last reason is children are very sensitive and I think they shouldn't tolerate any pain so we should help them more than another persons. There are too many children in poor countries who can't reach to suitable treatments and drugs. If we don't help them, they can't protect themselves. This organization sends drug and doctors to poor countries to help poor people who suffer from cancer.

Nowadays number of children who suffer from cancer is rising. Organizations like children Cancer Research Center can help more parents and children to pass this hard part of their life easier. I hope by helping this organization I make a better life for other people around the word.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, regarding, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 9.8082437276 265% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2333.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 525.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44380952381 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31469406548 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.390476190476 0.524837075471 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 713.7 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 14.0 1.86738351254 750% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.1627743067 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.095238095 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194343424507 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751399596135 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042855392358 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132189946163 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417781082819 0.0645574589148 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.77 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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