Nowadays, education is an essential part of our life and there are debates about where the best place for education is. While some may think homeschooling is better, I think schools are more convenient for education.
First, schools provide a proper atmosphere and environment for education. Teachers who work there, have been trained in how to teach and how to treat students. They have experience in teaching and know what they should do for each student to learn better. But, in homeschooling parents don’t have these experiences. Although some parents employ tutors, they lack experiences that teachers in schools have. Besides, there are many facilities which use especially in education. For instance, labs that students are trained in practical experiments there. Libraries are another examples. These libraries have books that are more related to the age and education of students than public libraries. Also, students can study in groups there and help each other to have a better understanding of lessons.
Second, children can learn crucial skills in schools which can’t be taught in homeschooling. Schools are a good place for this target. Because students are in touch with others and can learn how to make friends and how to get along with each other. Making a friend is an important skill for humans and schools are the best places for that. It is said by many people that they found their best friends in schools. As well, Students can learn how to negotiate. Negotiation is a key skill for every job and even in private lives. This skill helps to tell our idea and our expectations in a better way and convince people to accept our idea. For example, talking about one subject in class, students learn listening to other ideas, give their idea and discuss that subject. Besides, Schools offer other activities for students that lead to improving social skills. For example, they run some sports matches. By these activities, students learn to compete and try to earn their goals. Students learn they should be a hardworking person. Some of these plans run in groups. So students learn how to do their work in a team and how to collaborate with others. Furthermore, in schools students have an opportunity to get familiar with other cultures, other religions, and other ideas. Recognizing these diversities, students learn should respect other people and get ready for their big society. These social abilities are essential for their future. But, In homeschooling, there are two person and students are alone with their tutor or with their parents. Therefore, there is no chance to communicate with people in their age or peers. For instance, they can’t learn Social skills like making friends and negotiations. They have no opportunity to engage in groups.
To sum up, I believe to take advantage of schools for education is more suitable than homeschooling. Schools have experienced teachers and useful facilities. Also, students who educate in schools can improve their social skills.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ols are more convenient for education. First, schools provide a proper atmosphe...
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Line 2, column 250, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...hey should do for each student to learn better. But, in homeschooling parents don&apos...
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Line 3, column 709, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to listen'.
Suggestion: to listen
...ut one subject in class, students learn listening to other ideas, give their idea and dis...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, talking about, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2537.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 493.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14604462475 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70749060411 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460446247465 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 759.6 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 37.0 20.6003584229 180% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.1002170381 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.5675675676 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.3243243243 20.6045352989 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.91891891892 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0414764476178 0.236089414692 18% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0130694423459 0.076458572812 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0309045899211 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0275394874314 0.150856017488 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0174019171548 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.7 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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