As the scale of city area increasingly enlarge, people must take long time in traffic, whatever by public transportation or by car. My friend Jack, always complain to me that he need to take 1-hour subway to corporation, which is intolerable. Thus, many workers suggest the government to improve the city's public transportation, such as subway, bus, and taxi, in order to shorten their time of commute. I, however, insist that the improvement of Internet access is been urgently needed.
Firstly, the improvement of Internet access can empower us in our working aspect. To begin with, the Internet can make my work be efficiency. As a software engineer, I need to code a project with others at the same time, we need Internet access to finish our work, or we must code and check by ourselves. Besides, many companies, such as Apple and Google, have claimed that their employees can work from home during the COVID-19. So, with the Internet access, employees can decide where they will work in. What is more, if the company do not allow me work from home, and my commute time is long, I can watch movies or listen to music during the commute time. Even I can open my laptop, starting my office time anywhere. On the contrary, even if the public transportation is improved, and my commute time is shortened, I can not do anything without Internet.
Secondly, we can improve our life quality through the development of Internet. If I want to play video games with my friends, I can get in touch with them by telegram online, then play together online, too. Without gathering my friends to my house, I can freely and conveniently do anything that I want online. Also, I can save my time through the Online service. Take myself as an example. Once I decided to look for a cleaner to clean my house. However, I lived in a small town and there only one agency that can help me to looking for such service. I took several hours to drive to the agency but they told to me that all I need to do was to open my browser and fill in my information in their platform. I learned that I could take many services online, and I always asks for food delivery online. I save my time for exercising, which improves my fitness.
Admittedly, public transportation is also crucial for our daily life, but the advantages of network, including online teaching and job searching, outweighed the benefits that transportation brought to us.
In conclusion, with the Internet access, we can make our work more efficacy, improve our life quality. Also, we can solve the problem that we can not stand the boring during our commute time. Given that there is not any cellular data available in many rural area and subway, Internet access is in highly needed.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 642, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... watch movies or listen to music during the commute time. Even I can open my laptop, starti...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 771, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'ask'
Suggestion: ask
...take many services online, and I always asks for food delivery online. I save my tim...
^^^^
Line 5, column 802, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...I always asks for food delivery online. I save my time for exercising, which impr...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, thus, as to, in conclusion, such as, on the contrary, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2256.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69022869023 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65414560934 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490644490644 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3362778903 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7692307692 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19787184495 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676830482025 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698087474794 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133017946978 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380388906086 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 642, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... watch movies or listen to music during the commute time. Even I can open my laptop, starti...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 771, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'ask'
Suggestion: ask
...take many services online, and I always asks for food delivery online. I save my tim...
^^^^
Line 5, column 802, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...I always asks for food delivery online. I save my time for exercising, which impr...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, thus, as to, in conclusion, such as, on the contrary, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2256.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69022869023 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65414560934 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490644490644 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3362778903 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7692307692 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19787184495 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676830482025 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698087474794 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133017946978 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380388906086 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.