it is more important to work at a job that you enjoy than to earn a lot of money

Normally, it is very difficult to decide between two avenues when we are facing different possibilities in our career. Some people always think that an improvement on their money income is the best choice because they can give a better life to their families. However, I believe that is more important to work at a job that I really enjoy for two important reasons.

First, when we have pleasure to work with something, we put all our efforts to develop more our career. When we are working happy and motivated, we are always trying to find a better way to increase our knowledge. As an example, when we are excited with our job, we usually look forward to find a good conference to participate, good courses to do, or a person who can provide better information to us. Furthermore, when we love our job, we are more satisfied with ourselves and this is the first step for a sucessful professional life.

Secondly, a normal professional life has good and bad moments. Thus, if we are working in a job that we like, it is easier to support the difficult times. Today companies are looking for employees with a good knowledge, but they need to be very well prepared to solve problems. In my previous experience as a veterinarian, working happy and being part of an excellent professional group helped me to face problems easily and, consequently, achieve my goals faster. Honestly, if I was not working in a place that I am proud to be part, could be extremelly worst to solve some issues.

To conclude, in my opinion it is much more important to work in a place that you really enjoy. Money would be a consequence of our job and efforts. However, we need to be happy and satisfied to improve our professional life.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, honestly, however, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, thus, well, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1419.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 306.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63725490196 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78648577404 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52614379085 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4768669389 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.6 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192964582474 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817430240787 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109148768998 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148929089423 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0799027435576 0.0645574589148 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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