Nowadays earning a lot of money is more important than enjoying job. According to my observations,people can obtain more achievements if they gain more money. Some people are there who oppose this situation that people can not work properly if they can not enjoy. In my opinion, I disagree with that 'It is important to work at a job that you enjoy, even if salary low'.
First of all, providing economic necessities is the most crucial condition of living today. If you can not meet your family's and children's needs, then what is the use of enjoying job?In fact I have a friend, who works at National academy of sciences and his salary is very low. Although he enjoys his job to research or to investigate scientific materials, but he is not happy in family life because of economic circumstance.Hence, it is fact that money is important in work rather than enjoyment.
Another advantage of high income job is that people are able to travel during breaks. If you do not have enough money you will wait for starting job again instead of recess or travelling.It is clear that travelling is one of the best enjoyments in our life. So, when you earn more money you can supplement more enjoyable things in your life including travelling. Moreover you can make good living conditions when your salary is higher. We can see that it is so hard to live without house and car in today's world. To attain these requirements it is also possible only when your income is high.
One more point that high salary jobs are more challenging jobs than low salary. Why means employer always take more work from high salary employees. Without challenges in work employees will have less chance improve their efficiency and knowledge.
Final point is that people can do charity work when they earn a lot of money.I believe that everyone would like to do philanthropic actions and subsidize needy people. There are numerous poor families and disabled or handicapped children that waiting for help.I am sure so many people want to render financial aid to those humans.However, it is only possible when you earn a lot of money or you are a wealthy man.On the contrary with lower income you can neither meet your need and others.
Hence,some people argue that money is not important, but I believe that money is the solution to many problems. If you earn more money at work you will be able to meet your family's needs, in some aspect even you will be reputable person in society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, then, in fact, first of all, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2027.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71395348837 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67367128082 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502325581395 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.9784438333 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.35 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.482117351687 0.236089414692 204% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158631568956 0.076458572812 207% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13873064155 0.0737576698707 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263302197254 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.094769064827 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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