many people believe that greed, or the desire to have more wealth than other people have, is a bad characteristic; people who are greedy are often considered selfish or unkind. However, some people argue that greed is actually a good characteristic for a person to have because greedy people will work harder than others to become successful. Do you believe that greed can be a good characteristic? why or why not? Use specific reason to support your answer.
The part that greed, or the desire to have more money than others, plays in the success of a person is a controversial topic. While some people believe that this behavior leads to success as it encourages them to work hard, I beg to differ. Not only is this behavior deemed selfish and unkind by others, it can be harmful to the avaricious person as well.
First of all, we need to understand what success is, as the definition of success is very subjective. I believe that success is being happy, having enough and being safe. However, for someone else,success is measured by how much money they have. These people may find that greed would lead them to victory as it drives them to work hard.
People who have a high desire for materialistic gains are thought to be selfish. They are willing to do anything as long as they can profit from it. For example, a famous person may promote or sell potentially dangerous merchandise if they are able to receive a large sum of money from it. First of all, this is unethical as the lives of thousands of people are put at risk. Secondly, if this product is found to be harmful, the seller’s or promoter’s reputation is tarnished. This sabotages their success and has an even worse effect on the future.
In short, the desire to have money is not bad. Only when it turns into unhealthy obsession or a competition among people can it actually be dangerous, both to us and the people around us. Therefore, I believe that success should not be quantified by how much money one has, rather one should decide if they are successful depending on how happy they are.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , success
...nd being safe. However, for someone else,success is measured by how much money they have...
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Line 7, column 167, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...t actually be dangerous, both to us and the people around us. Therefore, I believe that success shou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in short, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1328.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 289.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59515570934 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55162569602 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543252595156 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.4388667695 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0625 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235174762676 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0852511589058 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0817001776544 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153429137852 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0251054049796 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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