In many places, students aged 12-
18 are typically taught different subjects by different teachers, while younger students are usually
taught by only one teacher all day long. Some people believe it would also benefit younger
students to be taught by several different teachers every day. Do you agree with this view? Why or
why not?
Educating young kids could be a little challenging and delicate. Although nowadays kids are barely shy or introverted, they still spend most of their time with their families and they can hardly get accustomed to different and new situations.
From my standpoint, school is one of the very first challenges we face in our life. Before starting education, most of the kids are highly reliant to their parents and it scarcely happen to find themselves alone; however, at school they must be away from their parents for several hours and they should be able to handle so many things on their own. Thus, most of the kids find their teacher as an adult who can help them in different tasks. Although it takes time for kids to trust their teacher, it would be better if they see only one adult as their teacher; this could make the trusting process happen faster.
Furthermore, at first years of schools, things that should be learnt by kids are myriad. They get to know mathematics for the first time, they have to write and read for the first time and they must learn about science and life around them for the first time. These tasks sometimes could be overwhelming for kids; and alongside with all these aforementioned subjects, they must get along with this new situation alone and they must adapt themselves with it very well. Therefore, if they have to deal with different teachers for every different subject, this can be a new burden for them and might get them even more nervous; but if all the subjects be taught by only a teacher, it would be a little easier for them to get along , specially if their teacher be compassionate and friendly to them.
In conclusion, the first years of school could be inundating and frightening for children; thus some actions must be taken to alleviate this arduous situation for them, seeing a familiar adult who teach all the subjects could be an effective solution.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 180, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'happens'?
Suggestion: happens
...eliant to their parents and it scarcely happen to find themselves alone; however, at s...
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Line 3, column 728, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...be a little easier for them to get along , specially if their teacher be compassio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, still, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1579.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74174174174 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48206482073 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501501501502 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.6709786909 48.9658058833 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.545454545 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2727272727 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72727272727 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134845478482 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057509548042 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572924722536 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0825047530777 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324094713025 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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