Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Universe is changing all the time, and so as people's life style. Nowadays, people are swamped in their jobs more than any other time. Personally, I believe people care less about their leisure time and they spend an abundant amount of their time on their works. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, as the world continue to develop, it gets harder to keep up with pace of changes. Nowadays, everything is intricated and adjusting to them takes time and effort. Therefore, people have to put more time and endeavor to make progress. This will be followed by a turbulent hectic life style which professional career is a paramount part of it. My father is a compelling example of this. Although he was married and he had two children, he had to work till late and his job was always his priority. To some extent, he had no other choice, as he had to fulfill his boss's requests, otherwise he would have got expelled. In consequence of all that, my parents' marriage failed when I was ten. On the other hand, my grandfather, who have six children, managed to work and run his family at the same time. Hence, I believe it was easier in the past.
Another significant reason which is worth telling is that people's target and priorities have changed a lot compared to old time. In the past, people used to work and try to support their family and they did not have longing for promotion or raise in salary, as long as they could meet their family needs. These days, however, the ultimate target is integrity. People want to be the best of themselves and they see success in their profession or education, not in maintaining a family. Thus, most people have propensity to sacrifice so many things and even spend their free time on their jobs. For instance, when I went to my grandparents and stayed at their home for summer. My grandfather used to stay at his shop for regular hours, and everyday he was home by five o'clock. On the other hand, right now that I am a grown up and I have a job, I can't leave sooner than eight. Moreover, I sometimes even work at my weekends. As a result, I don't think today's people can shirk their duties and enjoy themselves more, since they see success virtually in their career.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that due to the hectic life style most people lead, and their eager for success in their career, they are overwhelmed and less likely waste their time on enjoying themselves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 767, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: o'clock
...hours, and everyday he was home by five oclock. On the other hand, right now that I am...
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Line 3, column 845, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...hat I am a grown up and I have a job, I cant leave sooner than eight. Moreover, I so...
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Line 3, column 938, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ven work at my weekends. As a result, I dont think todays people can shirk their dut...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2030.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52115812918 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46047721898 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527839643653 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2080807998 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.2 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.96 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.32 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120384979908 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0353917829413 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314946172284 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0826650930289 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286308827316 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.64 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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