Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.
One of the main actions to sell and boost the products is an advertisement. So in this way producers could attract the cushion from customers. Despite people sometimes thinks some advertisements are exaggerating. In my point of view, I believe that advertisements even if is somehow exaggerating about the product but it helps people especially the young generation to push for buying it which I think Isn’t a bad idea. In this essay, I am going to describe two main reasons which support this idea which advertisement is good even if sometimes exaggerating.
To begin with, attracting customers always is the one and only one aim for producers and sellers. In fact, sometimes some products contain different features that ordinary customer doesn’t know about it but after watching the advertisement she or he recognizes that this product is the one she or he wants. Although, the product is shown more than what it is in the advertisement. It helps people to buy it with the way of showing the product. For instance, a shampoo contains many items such as conditioner but if no advertisement applies to it definitely the product wouldn’t be sold so as a result, advertisement gives some value to the product to be sell.
Secondly, people like to be pushed to buy the product, as a result, no one buys a product if the product doesn’t impress them to buy. The advertisement should be a little bet exaggerating to show the product better than what it is to be the sale. For example, if a product like close wants to be a sale so the producer should wear that close to a tine tall girl and does the effect on the model to show it very fancy and beautiful, in fact, even a person who buys the close is fat and maybe doesn’t know the quality of the clothes but because she is seeing it on the model body, she attracts to buy it.
To sum up, the advertisement is made to impress people to buy a product, so the action should be unique and show the product much better than what it is to be sold. Otherwise, some products with good quality but bad advertisement doesn’t affect people to buy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 307, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...his product is the one she or he wants. Although, the product is shown more than what it...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 411, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fancies'?
Suggestion: fancies
...the effect on the model to show it very fancy and beautiful, in fact, even a person w...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, such as, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62032085561 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85750703406 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.449197860963 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 538.2 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.7407560712 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.2 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9333333333 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46666666667 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180541533068 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762361349934 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510967973204 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134009244067 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426350501465 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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