The most important goal of education is to teach people how to educate themselves.
Currently, it is not a rare thing for all of individuals to be received education. Well, what is the most crucial purpose of education that still is a controversial issue. Some people assert that it is not undoubtable that teaching people makes them know how to teach themselves that is the most important. While the standpoint of others is that teaching people to know how to teach themselves should not be the most important goal. Personally, the later opinion, I believe, is more reasonable.
To begin with, one of the most important goals of education is to teach people how to respect others. This is because one of the prestigious people, Confucian, said that respecting others is one of the most aspect in education. However, according to the research done by Yale university have showed that about the 70 percent of students in American universities were used to throwing trash away without concerning the hard work of cleaners. Furthermore, about the 80 percent of scholars yelled to their parents because of some little matters, not considering their parent’s feeling. In this case, form the research, it is obvious that many learners do not know how to respect other, hence learning how to respect others should be set as one of the most important goals for education.
Additionally, teaching people to communicate with the all kinds of individuals should be one of the crucial goals of education. As we know, after graduating from school, scholars have to enter the society of whole citizens. Normally, in schools, students may not meet some persons who are difficult to communicate, but in the society, they do. For instance, my bother, choi, graduated from his university last year and found a new job in one of the apple stores. However, one of his leaders was pretty strange, she usually required choi and other employees to do some pretty difficult and unbeneficial tasks. In this case, choi and his colleagues wanted to talk with this leader to solve this problem. Whereas, none of them was used to learn how to communicate with the people who are highly strange. In this case, they still be required to do these disgusting tasks now. obviously, it is not an overstatement that learning how to communicate with other should be considered as one of the most teaching goals.
In conclusion, since learning how to communicate with others and how to respect others are so important, I believe, so I still insist my point that most important goal of education is not to teach people how to educate themselves.
- do you agree or disagree with the statement students should be required to study basic science to graduate 71
- teachers performance should be evaluated by students rather than by other teachers 73
- people prefer to cook food by themselves or eat at cafeteria 70
- the most important problems will be solved during our lives time 79
- do you agree or disagree with the statement that should students take the course taught in a traditional way that teachers speak and student listen or the course that student discuss and talk 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... themselves that is the most important. While the standpoint of others is that teachi...
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Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...with this leader to solve this problem. Whereas, none of them was used to learn how to ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Obviously
...uired to do these disgusting tasks now. obviously, it is not an overstatement that learni...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, still, well, whereas, while, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92523364486 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80147494312 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457943925234 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 645.3 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0963717328 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.4 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389064714677 0.236089414692 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127282360657 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.175295798036 0.0737576698707 238% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.319157073057 0.150856017488 212% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.160951774132 0.0645574589148 249% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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