It is conspicuous that the government should be responsible to provide its citizens with shelters, enhance its citizens’ education level and boost its country’s economy and citizen’s income. Among all these responsibilities, a government also ought to step up efforts to upgrade the healthcare for its citizens. In such case, contrary to public’s belief, I do not agree that the most important thing the government should do to upgrade the healthcare is to clean the environment as there are other more important things the government should consider.
First of all, building more advanced and first-class medical facilities around the country is more crucial for the government to do to improve the healthcare. This is because nowadays, with the increasing number of population, the existing medical centers and hospitals are always crowded with people waiting for the doctors. Besides, most of the medical equipment in the hospitals are completely out of order and outdated. As a result, residents cannot receive their health care properly. However, if the government can establish more state-of-the-art medical facilities and hospital, the residents may be able to receive their healthcare appropriately.
In the second place, the government may also allocate its revenue to the health center or hospital to compensate the price, with the dwellers need to pay for receiving the medical care. To illustrate, it is undoubted that while the country dwellers go visiting a doctor and receive the medicines or other medical helps, the dwellers always need to pay a significant amount of money. Some of the poorer dwellers might, therefore, be not able to afford this large deal of money and cannot receive appropriate medical treatments. Nonetheless, if the government allocates its revenue to the health center and hospital, the poorer dwellers can be able to afford the price of medicine and have a higher likelihood of receiving proper medical treatments.
By contrast, there is a popular opinion that it is vital that the government clean the environment in an attempt to improve the health care. This is because, nowadays, the pollution problems all permeate in our society, adversely contributing to people’s poor health condition. Nevertheless, based on my observation, the underlying problem still exists if the government only try to recover the environment. That is, the medical centers and facilities are still falling short and outdated, and most of the poor residents still cannot afford the high price of medical treatments. Thus, considering the priorities, it is hard to convince people that the most important thing for the government to do is to clean the environment.
All in all, setting up more high-tech medical facilities and medical center is more important for a government to do. This is because nowadays, most of the medical center and facilities are too outdated to use. Besides, governments can also allocate its revenue to the medical centers or hospitals so that its residents can afford the expensive price of the medicines and treatments. Finally, although some people argue that the most important thing the government should do is to clean the environment in order to improve the health care, I think that this method is time-wasting and cannot fully solve the two existing problems mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 384, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, i think, as a result, first of all, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 8.0752688172 310% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2842.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 530.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36226415094 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79809637944 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05202545543 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.407547169811 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 881.1 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.0665638238 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.333333333 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2380952381 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.80952380952 5.45110844103 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304194575389 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103935701289 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130519139512 0.0737576698707 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195963855397 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104722274319 0.0645574589148 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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