the most important ways to improve the people's health is to clean the environment
Environment's impact on human beings' well-being is a very substantial matter. The opinions are divided as to whether cleaning the environment does not have a significant effect on our health or it would be beneficial for us. when it comes to me, It is my firm conviction that the benefits of cleaning the environment for our well-being are more than neglecting it. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, the dile consequences of polluting the environment return to us. Releasing the chemical contaminations of hospitals, the plastic residues, releasing sewage to lakes or rivers and industrial pollutants will have reversible or irreversible impacts on environment and people's health accordingly. Statistics reveal that the main cause of the majority of death-leading diseases such as different cancers originates from environmental pollutants, especially air and water contaminants. As a result, by cleaning our surrounding environment, we will be able to eliminate a lot of dangerous diseases which increase the average health of the society.
The second reason coming to mind is rooted in the fact that throwing out our useless materials such as plastic bottles can alter the species around us. I share an example to illuminate my point. It goes without saying that eating fishes are very useful for our organs due to rich nutrients. However, some investigations have found that most the ocean's and lakes' fishes have a considerable amount of plastics in their body, when people eat fish, they will absorb a part of these harmful plastics. Since they will vulnerable to numerous and death-leading diseases. Needlees to say, cleaning the oceans and water resources would be beneficial for us as well.
In brief, I believe that cleaning the environment is an influential way to enhance our health. Since not only the contaminations bring about a lot of consequences for us but also they will return to our body in a different way and it is a repetitious cycle.
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- TPO 52 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 103, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...antial matter. The opinions are divided as to whether cleaning the environment does not have ...
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Line 5, column 130, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding species'?
Suggestion: the surrounding species
...rials such as plastic bottles can alter the species around us. I share an example to illuminate my po...
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Line 7, column 209, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...s but also they will return to our body in a different way and it is a repetitious cycle.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, if, second, so, well, as to, in brief, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15868263473 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09430956664 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559880239521 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2484374762 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.6875 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.875 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18623865887 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615872637833 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700368397973 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121231670337 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439543959146 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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