Now a days a lot of celebrities can be seen in the TV or in social media, whether those celebrities have great influence on young people or on old ones, this can be weighted in many aspects. In my perspective. I concur with statement that celebrities and athletes have crucial effect on younger people more than parent. In this essay I will elaborate on a couple reasons with compel examples to explain my point of view about this exposition.
First, and foremost, the most important reason is these celebrities always appear in social media, furthermore the teenagers have good experience in this field more than our parent or teachers, the youngster always imitate those famous persons, they have same ages, young people interested with famous singers or actors, in addition, the important company used these celebrities to advertising purpose like cloths or cars, hence young people are highly interested with these things, therefore young persons highly effected by famous and athletes characters, for instance, my daughter like BTS Koreen singers. She follow them by their Instagram and face book, listen to their songs, in the other hand I never know them before. As you see the effect of celebrities on young individual’life.
In addition, old people do not have any interest with the famous persons and never pay any attaintion about them, moreover, old people have a good experience and thought they are wiser than any celebrities or athletes hence they do not except any advice or cannot imitate any one, in addition they are not interested with social media like young people, that vway they do not have any contact with this type of characters, as a conclusion, celebrities do not have a noticeable effect on old people.
To sum up, the statement is as persuasive as it stands, based on exposition that are mentioned above, which explain that celebrities have a paramount impact on teenager life style, like cloths. Type of car they ride and their behavior, as contrast to old people which do not have any interest with these things.
Now a days a lot of celebrities can be seen in the TV or in social media, whether those celebrities have great influence on young people or on old ones, this can be weighted in many aspects. In my perspective. I concur with statement that celebrities and athletes have crucial effect on younger people more than parent. In this essay I will elaborate on a couple reasons with compel examples to explain my point of view about this exposition.
First, and foremost, the most important reason is these celebrities always appear in social media, furthermore the teenagers have good experience in this field more than our parent or teachers, the youngster always imitate those famous persons, they have same ages, young people interested with famous singers or actors, in addition, the important company used these celebrities to advertising purpose like cloths or cars, hence young people are highly interested with these things, therefore young persons highly effected by famous and athletes characters, for instance, my daughter like BTS Koreen singers. She follow them by their Instagram and face book, listen to their songs, in the other hand I never know them before. As you see the effect of celebrities on young individual’life.
In addition, old people do not have any interest with the famous persons and never pay any attaintion about them, moreover, old people have a good experience and thought they are wiser than any celebrities or athletes hence they do not except any advice or cannot imitate any one, in addition they are not interested with social media like young people, that vway they do not have any contact with this type of characters, as a conclusion, celebrities do not have a noticeable effect on old people.
To sum up, the statement is as persuasive as it stands, based on exposition that are mentioned above, which explain that celebrities have a paramount impact on teenager life style, like cloths. Type of car they ride and their behavior, as contrast to old people which do not have any interest with these things.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: a day; days
Now a days a lot of celebrities can be seen in the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1712.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99125364431 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70109970512 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492711370262 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 183.091370632 48.9658058833 374% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 171.2 100.406767564 171% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.3 20.6045352989 166% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.2 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423412234692 0.236089414692 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.179142823337 0.076458572812 234% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.206036064768 0.0737576698707 279% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.283307967236 0.150856017488 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.212379681468 0.0645574589148 329% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 11.7677419355 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 58.1214874552 64% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 10.1575268817 163% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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