The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Famous entertainers and athletes usually bring tons of fun and happiness to hectic lives. There is no shortage of opinions on the topic of celebrities' opinions being more important to younger people than they are to older people. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely agree with this statement wholeheartedly without a doubt. I feel this way for a few reasons which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, youngsters are more immature than elders. Since elder people have gone through a variety of difficulties and hold more life experiences, they would not be easily affected by the opinions of celebrities. However, youngsters need some spiritual support on their way to success so they would depend more on the opinions of those who they admire. My personal experience is a great example of this. When I was in high school, I was bullied by my peers because of my nerdy character. Depression came to me and I was afraid of consulting my parents or even a doctor. Nevertheless, everything changed after I saw the performance of Jennifer Lawrence in the movie, The Hunger Games. She gave her opinions on how to cope with all the difficulties and never tend to give up while filming vigorous sports. She made me feel more self-confident and dare to speak out to my parents. As a result, I was not bullied anymore as my peers got grounded and I finished high school successfully. Thus, the opinions of celebrities are profoundly influential to young people.
Secondly, young people have more issues with choice-making decisions such as looking for a suitable career after graduating. As there are different unique careers available in society, young people tend to immerse themselves in the dilemma of choosing the right career. However, elder people have done enough in their lifetime and do not have to think of choosing a new career. In fact, sometimes the opinions of celebrities could solve this problem. Drawing from the experience of my sister. While she was at the junction of choosing between studying medicine or being an athlete, she was influenced by the great words that a famous athlete runner, Bolt who told people not to give up on their dreams wherever they are. As she loves to run because of her competitive personality, she took up this career and represented our country. Such achievements would not be accomplished without the opinions of her favorite celebrity.
In light of the above-mentioned, I strongly believe that the opinions of celebrities are more important to younger individuals as they are still inexperienced and have difficulties in making decisions.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, i feel, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2193.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01830663616 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96893272502 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526315789474 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4721334752 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.375 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2083333333 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95833333333 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359625630407 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0854778940505 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112094302938 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234424183847 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076783747284 0.0645574589148 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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