In our wold there are many celebrities and famous people who have their opnion that may influance others around them. The question is, whether those celebrities more important for young people than older or not. This can be weighed in many aspects. Admittedly, some individuals believe that celebrities important to old people as important as to young people. Many old persons interested with watching sports, therefore they may admire with athletes of famous payer. But, in my opinion, yuongesters are more interested with celebrities opnion. In the following essay, I will elaborate on a couple reasons to explain my point of view,
First, and formost, young people know more about celebrities and famous people . This is mainly because, youngesters have wider social media than olders. kids and teenagers have many more familiar withtechnology and how to use smart devices like I pad and computer. Therefore, they have facebook and twitter from these application they can know ang hear about famous acter or athletes who may admire with and influence with his opinion. For example, my son like Cristiano. Therefore he passion with football games. My son always watch any foot ball match when this player play in it,, For me, when I was youner, I injoy watching football game and I have had my celebrity who I like him, but right know I do not interested with these games, therefore I do not know any sporter.
Furthermore, all celebriteies are youn people, they wear clothes which may be considered as a style and young people try to immitate them with their clothes, shoes and even with their cars models, This is because, many companies use these famous people to advertise their products. And as we know how is our kids interested with buying clothes and other products more than us.
In our wold there are many celebrities and famous people who have their opnion that may influance others around them. The question is, whether those celebrities more important for young people than older or not. This can be weighed in many aspects. Admittedly, some individuals believe that celebrities important to old people as important as to young people. Many old persons interested with watching sports, therefore they may admire with athletes of famous payer. But, in my opinion, yuongesters are more interested with celebrities opnion. In the following essay, I will elaborate on a couple reasons to explain my point of view,
First, and formost, young people know more about celebrities and famous people . This is mainly because, youngesters have wider social media than olders. kids and teenagers have many more familiar withtechnology and how to use smart devices like I pad and computer. Therefore, they have facebook and twitter from these application they can know ang hear about famous acter or athletes who may admire with and influence with his opinion. For example, my son like Cristiano. Therefore he passion with football games. My son always watch any foot ball match when this player play in it,, For me, when I was youner, I injoy watching football game and I have had my celebrity who I like him, but right know I do not interested with these games, therefore I do not know any sporter.
Furthermore, all celebriteies are youn people, they wear clothes which may be considered as a style and young people try to immitate them with their clothes, shoes and even with their cars models, This is because, many companies use these famous people to advertise their products. And as we know how is our kids interested with buying clothes and other products more than us.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, may, so, therefore, as to, for example, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 300.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58986241636 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556666666667 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.9377508684 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.476123031148 0.236089414692 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.174243657408 0.076458572812 228% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.161376741132 0.0737576698707 219% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.349149222146 0.150856017488 231% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.183299194959 0.0645574589148 284% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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