Parents are always concerning their children's education and this tendency is significantly conspicuous than before. Because education is on of the strongest indicators to trigger someone's future success. Based on the phenomenon that I observed and the information that I mentioned, I hold the believe that Parents today are more involved in their children's education than before.
First, the parents are spending more money to the education field than before. For reasons that, first, with the development of economy, the essential need of eating and wearing is fulfilled and more and more visionaries are appealing to spend more money for future, which is the background of the interest that the investment of children's education increases. And this willing is boosted by the factor that Chinese conventional culture believes that a good education is a straightforward way to a delighting career path. Secondly, the sector of education is developed and more and more option is released to parents to choose. Swimming, golf, dancing, learning English, all of them need a large amount of money. The more willingness the parents have to get involved to children's education, the more money they are determined to spend.
Second, the time that parents accompany with their children for intension of education is augmented. Parents always choose playing games and reading books to expand their children's horizon and enlarge their children’s capability. One of my friends, Jimmy, who is a father, chooses play football game with his daughter after work, and a typical length of this activity is one hour a day, which is elongated fifty percent than before. The reason that Jimmy makes this time longer is that the leadership of his daughter is cultivated when she has a intuition to order her teammates to achieve a particular goal as well as collaborate with others, and this growth is detected by him. Jimmy believes that this change that he commits more time to his children's education will definitely contribute to achieve his daughter's individual identification and her personal confidence.
Third, the goal that the parent makes for their children is higher than before. In the past, no one have a clear idea of the ability of a person can be, we all only have a highly ambiguous vision that a good education is valuable, but no one can tell what is the definition of "good education". Consequently, the goal which is the reflection of parent's expectation is incredibly low. However, nowadays, with the increase of the average TOEFL score and sort of things like that, every parent has an insight that what is a suitable goal for their child, and the goal is higher that before accordingly. To obtain this cognition, a parent needs to know more information and establish more relationships with education institutions, which all play as ingredients to the parents' involvement to children's education.
- It is important to know about events happening around the world even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life 76
- it is not a good thing to move to a new city or country because we will lose old friends 90
- Parents today are more involved in their children s education than were parents in the past 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Parents are always concerning their childrens education and this tend...
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... significantly conspicuous than before. Because education is on of the strongest indica...
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...he information that I mentioned, I hold the believe that Parents today are more involved in...
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Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
...nformation that I mentioned, I hold the believe that Parents today are more involved in...
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to play'.
Suggestion: to play
...ion is augmented. Parents always choose playing games and reading books to expand their...
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to play'
Suggestion: to play
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
...s, which all play as ingredients to the parents involvement to childrens education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, well, sort of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 8.0752688172 322% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2449.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18855932203 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92651473141 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48093220339 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 765.0 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.3216569073 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.894736842 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8421052632 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57894736842 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.490954445938 0.236089414692 208% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180635169552 0.076458572812 236% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136618769826 0.0737576698707 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.335891913706 0.150856017488 223% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0971606072852 0.0645574589148 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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