In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
I believe young people are making more independent decisions compare to their counterpart in the past. In my opinion, education and communication technology contributed to this independence.
In the recent years, educational systems provide a common ground for young people in each country to become independent. These systems taught other's experiences through different books and courses. By understanding these experiences they can predict the result of their actions so they can make more plausible decisions. For instance, they learn that people with higher education has achieved a higher salary and as a result they can decide whether it is worth it to go to university or not. In addition, education can help them make better decision in wider areas while parents help to make decision is limited to a specific area which is not enough in today's world.
Another point is that in recent years communication technology has provided a tremendous help to individuals including young people. Young people can search their situation and see if other people had the same problem and use their reactions as a model in their life. For example, once I decided to apply for a foreign university my parents could not help me much with choosing a university, but using Internet I could find several groups which listed each universities' pros and cons. As a result I could decide what university offers a better curriculum.
Overall, young people became less dependent on their parents help because they know more than their last counterparts. Additionally, technology helped them indeed to access more people beside their parents.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 33, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...rld. Another point is that in recent years communication technology has provided a...
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Line 5, column 486, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...listed each universities pros and cons. As a result I could decide what university...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1375.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 261.0 407.700716846 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26819923372 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85806292031 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582375478927 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9899684654 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.769230769 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0769230769 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61538461538 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.392407574975 0.236089414692 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134766103622 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120139882398 0.0737576698707 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251633093916 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031709683477 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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