people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon.
Interest to living long is one of inherent traits of human beings. During history you can find a lot of evidences which show people endured hardships to find ways for surviving and living longer. Based on this inherent character, technology and science related to medicine have developed in last decades. As a result of mentioned development people are living longer now. In the following essay I will explore how this development has led to long living of people.
The main reason is that nowadays we can cure a lot of diseases because of developed technologies. Especially during the last century medicine and surgery science have been developed and numerous of epidemic diseases are eliminated. For example you can find a lot of villages and cities in history which all of them citizens died because of an epidemic disease. In this regard I have read a book recently about epidemic disease in ancient Egypt. According to this book about 5000 citizens of a village died during one month because of an unknown disease, and also the book mentions to other disasters which their reasons were unclear, but now we know the reasons and ways of controlling them. Also the book gives some information about human first tries to surgery, and says that a lot of them were not successful. Comparing the mentioned information in this book with the contemporary surgery and medicine science shows that we can live longer than previous generations of human beings.
Another reason is that contemporary human knows how to manage his/her work to avoid any disturb. Now we know that how many hours we need to work and rest, how much eat and how to spend our free times in a way that being in the best physical situation. For instance my grandfather’s experience is a compelling example of this. He was an employee of an advertisement company and was working behind a desk about for three decades. As his working area and specially his chair wasn’t ergonomic, he had some problems in his back. Unfortunately as a result of this problem he got a cancer and died at the age of sixty. Nowadays based on developments on ergonomic chairs and working office conditions, we can work as long as possible without any problem on our body. This example illustrates that with development of knowledge, people can work longer and healthier.
In conclusion, I believe that better working condition and high knowledge about medicine and surgery lead to longer living of people. Finally it is obvious that people could live as longer as possible in the near future by development of science and making better living condition.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Interest to living long is one of inhere...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...e reasons and ways of controlling them. Also the book gives some information about h...
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Line 4, column 134, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...urgery lead to longer living of people. Finally it is obvious that people could live as...
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...bvious that people could live as longer as possible in the near future by developm...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2169.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91836734694 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75928035301 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473922902494 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 693.0 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7585689085 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5909090909 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0454545455 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.81818181818 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211188942903 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0760520583159 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0898358755574 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163668614317 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0848288141932 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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