People argue whether the most important goal of education is to teach people how to educate themselves Based on my personal opinion I agree for some reasons | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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People argue whether the most important goal of education is to teach people how to educate themselves. Based on my personal opinion, I agree for some reasons.

First of all, people care about good time management, and they can learn how to develop good time management skills by themselves. For example, there are always a lot of homework for students to do and they have to determine how much time they need to spend on . Too be more specific, they have to distribute time to subjects according to how much emergent these subjects are. Moreover, they can also learn how to distribute their free time by education. Therefore, people can learn how to develop good time management skills by education.

Secondly, people are concerned with social network and self-learning helps them build good social network skills. For instance, students meet others in schools or other educational facilities and these are good places for them to introduce themselves to others. In addition, students can learn how to express their ideas with interesting ways, making them more acceptable to others. On the other hand, without education, people would not know how to develop social network. Accordingly, education helps people build good social network skills.

Last but not least, people focus on passion and learning passion through experiences is possible. For example, it requires students a lot of passion in school in order to solve the problems they face. Too be more accurate, students may encounter different opinions when making decisions, and he has to spend a lot of time to convince others why others should listen to him and take his idea instead of others'. On the contrary, people would not have the chance to develop their passion, if they have not been educated. As a result, people can cultivate passion via education.

In sum, because people take emphasis on good time management skill, social network, and passion, I strongly insist that self-learning is a definitely way for people to do so.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 261, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...mine how much time they need to spend on . Too be more specific, they have to dist...
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Line 1, column 264, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to be'?
Suggestion: To be
...e how much time they need to spend on . Too be more specific, they have to distribute ...
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Line 5, column 202, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to be'?
Suggestion: To be
... order to solve the problems they face. Too be more accurate, students may encounter d...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e can cultivate passion via education. In sum, because people take emphasis on ...
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Line 7, column 138, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('definitely') instead an adjective, or a noun ('way') instead of another adjective.
...I strongly insist that self-learning is a definitely way for people to do so.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, as a result, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1544.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 303.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09570957096 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64927438715 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.49504950495 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 470.7 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7671732461 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9375 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9375 5.45110844103 219% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171915967695 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0718631900075 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040579123055 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114545873375 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270810194904 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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