People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Visiting another nations and cultures is very rewarding. Traveling learn us how to conduct the life perfectly as well as you exposed to many groups of people. Moreover, traveling can result in a wise and generous personality. I strongly disagree with this sentiment that states national traveling more advantageous than international traveling. For many reasons I am against this idea which I will explore them in the following assay.
First, traveling is very important as visiting different countries can help to build personalities of wisdom. Exploring the world learn us how to be so understanding and open -minded. For example, people who are regularly traveling abroad more subjected to variety of cultures. As a result ,this will expand our thinking immensely about other people and enable us to be more tolerated and integrated with many cultures. For instance, my father is habitually visiting other nations every single year and because of that he is truly open-minded and admirable for different cultures despite of vary in the faiths and traditions to some extent. On the other hand, my uncle is stubborn and single-minded because he only prefer expeditions locally. Hence, I believe that traveling is very important to our way of thinking.
Moreover, visiting other countries is worthwhile.Voyages to another nations can teach us how to be human. To illustrate more, traveling to developing and poor countries such as nations in Africa make the people completely grasper of the bitter truth that some people are suffering from starvation. For example, well-known person from my kingdom is famed of being truly adored for traveling. One time, he decided to go to Africa to start a new experiences. Once he arrived there, he has seen a lot of impoverished people who are fighting with hunger in order to survive. On this ground he has decided to remain in order to support them. Accordingly, he is one of the most influential people in supporting poor folk in Africa and on this ground many campaigns have been launched.
In summary, traveling abroad teach us how to be considerate with different norms and traditions. Moreover, expose us to the people who are underprivileged. Therefore, making us people of mercy.
- TPO 15 80
- A gift (such as a camera, a soccer ball, or an animal) can contribute to a child`s development. What gift would you give to help a child develop? Why? Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice. 70
- TPO 15 85
- People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. 68
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 147, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...om. Exploring the world learn us how to be so understanding and open -minded. For example, people w...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...cted to variety of cultures. As a result ,this will expand our thinking immensely ...
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Line 3, column 716, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'prefers'.
Suggestion: prefers
...bborn and single-minded because he only prefer expeditions locally. Hence, I believe t...
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Line 5, column 50, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Voyages
... visiting other countries is worthwhile.Voyages to another nations can teach us how to ...
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Line 5, column 444, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'experience'?
Suggestion: experience
... decided to go to Africa to start a new experiences. Once he arrived there, he has seen a l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in summary, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1870.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15151515152 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00604111625 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512396694215 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.4787744761 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.0 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.22727272727 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213007848165 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643798391385 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694254665689 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132143759396 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220722616147 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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