People learn things better from those at their own level- such as fellow students or co workers- than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors.
I think individuals learn things better from those who are at higher level than themselves. The reasons to support my viewpoint are elaborated on in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, people who are at higher level are more knowledgeable than person who is in the same age or same level. To be more specific, in todays sophisticated and competitive world, individuals need to do their best to reach a higher stages. It is no secret to anyone that people who are in higher stages are expert in their field since they encounter various challenges and find a ways to solve and pass their problems. In this case, they have more experiences in their fields. As a result, when one asks more experienced and knowledgeable people's helps and advises, those people are able to convey their information more easily and effectively. An example can shed some light on this issue. Consider a student who has a problem in his project. In this case, if he is supervised by teacher who encounters such a problem in the past or has a strong background in that field of study, student will able to learn how to solve his problem.
Moreover, people, especially youngsters, have been affected by adults and famous persons. To put it in other word, since juveniles are not mature enough to distinguish among right and wrong, they strive to follow and learn from adults and take them as their role models. In this case, asking adults' help when they need, young people will put their advises into practice to pave their ways. On the other hand, consider two primary students who are very intimate friends. If one of them face a challenge in his school works, and asks his or her friend helps, his or her friend are not able to help him if he is not a good student. Besides, we can extend this example to more challenging situation.
In conclusion, contemplating all the mentioned reasons and points, I do believe that individuals will accept and learn from older people or whom they are at higher level than those at their own level. This is because people at higher levels are more knowledgeable and people inclined to learn and accept adults opinions
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- TPO 49 - Integrated writing 85
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...e to learn how to solve his problem. Moreover, people, especially youngsters,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, moreover, so, i think, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72727272727 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59578852132 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4000112461 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2222222222 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7777777778 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34466334109 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103625497648 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13191396943 0.0737576698707 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258752260639 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129482280401 0.0645574589148 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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