People who develop many different skills are more successful than people who focus on one skill only.
By and large, in this busy and advanced world where we live, skills not only play a major role in our life but also affect any aspect of it. Anyone should have some skills to be successful but the amount of skills is a challenge that should be solved. I agree with the statement which people who developed more skills are more successful. The reason and examples for supporting my opinion are elaborated on here down.
The first and foremost reason is that skilled people have more and better job opportunities than those who are focus on one skill. I use my life experience to illustrate this aspect of opinion. Three years ago, when I graduated from university, I had special skills in two programming languages, Python and R. and my best friend started to seek a job in programming or related areas. After a month, I found 36 positions to apply for. On the other hand, my friend found just 11 positions. This big difference is because of more skills just I had learned. If I did not learn more skills, I would not have been able to have more options. As a result, we can conclude that with more expertise we can have more options to choose from.
Besides that, another important reason is that more skills can provide more income for us. People who are skilled more and in different areas have more income and advantages than other peoples. With a clear example, I am going to clarify this reason. One of the newest and best fields for young students and researchers is Data Science and related fields just like Machine Learning and Deep Learning. People who had skilled in more fields of the mentioned topics have more revenue than other people who have expertise in just one area. The most skilled people have positions like Data Team Manager or Leader of the Team which has bigger income than other positions. It is also truthful in other fields. Consequently, more skills can cause more benefits.
In sum, taking into account the mentioned reasons, I think that more skills not only can provide many job options for us but also give more income to us.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 104, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...and better job opportunities than those who are focus on one skill. I use my life exper...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, if, so, i think, as a result, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62397820163 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37832987913 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.49863760218 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.863014099 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.1363636364 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6818181818 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63636363636 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453961379856 0.236089414692 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133406466972 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.152387633421 0.0737576698707 207% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276598691552 0.150856017488 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0844473075311 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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