Question :Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Controversy exists over whether we need to know about less important events happening all over the world. In my opinion, it is more beneficial to consider a priority to news that is more important because not only we can save our time and spend it on other essential areas, but also we have an opportunity to concentrate better in relevant areas.
The first aspect to point out is that following unimportant events around the world could be seen as a waste of time and energy. Currently, life in the fast lane today has turned out to be so hectic and tedious to us. We should use our time as efficiently as possible. In this term, some events are happened around the word, and it is not required to follow them when they are not beneficial for us. In other words, people should concentrate on other essential areas that are more effective and have a positive influence on their life. For example, when they have an appropriate time, they should enjoy it with their friends, or spend it doing sports and other leisure activities. In fact, these activities are more beneficial for them in various terms, such as social attitudes and their relationship.
Another more subtle point is that we could focus on more critical events in deeper significance. Some events that occur could have a huge impact on our life. For instance, mining industries require a high level of knowledge and expertise. In my case, it is more important to follow those events that happened in high-tech companies with regard to the developments in mining industries. BHP is one mining company that equips us with an insightful view over different problems in this profession. by rewarding experience and problem solving, I have a chance to gain real experience and learn practical skills, which lead to promotion and a successful career.
In conclusion, there are much more events happening around the world, and we should pay more attention to those events that are more important for our life and career rather than those which have little effect on daily life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 496, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: By
... different problems in this profession. by rewarding experience and problem solvin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion, in other words, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86246418338 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6239942395 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52435530086 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0199960016 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0625 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8125 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1875 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169096557263 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595020989735 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535503135594 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112220555093 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025977129774 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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