Question Some parents offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Question: Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school.
Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There is no shortage of opinion on parents offering their school-age children money for each high grade they get in school but if you want my opinion, I would definitely agree with parents giving money for a high grade to their children. It is my firm belief it can teach children responsibility and also encourage them to study harder. I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, if you are offered money for doing something, it is basically a job and you have a responsibility to do it perfect. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. In my childhood, my mother gave me money for high grades and in return expected me to study hard and don’t forget any of my home works. And it worked without a problem. As a result, I always tried to do everything perfectly because I knew I was responsible. Moreover, having money is a great learning opportunity to be more responsible and learning to manage it in a young age can help the child in adulthood. For this reason, I think it is indeed a good idea.
Secondly, money is an excellent motivation to study even if you don’t enjoy the subject. Every student has a subject witch doesn’t like or just thinks it’s boring or even hard. But if you offer a student money for a high score, it can make staying awake at night, and losing parties to study a lot easier. Moreover, the student can use the money for improving his or her grade as an investment like books, and classes for getting higher grades and as result more money. It's certainly clear to see why parents offering their money for high grades can help them study harder.
In light of the reasons mentioned, I strongly believe that parents offering their school-age children money for each high grade is a good idea. Because it teaches them responsibility and encourage them to study to get higher grades. Over all, it benefits the children the most.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, i think, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1616.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63037249284 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64609728756 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515759312321 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2702333959 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7777777778 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3888888889 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407408642047 0.236089414692 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123018256643 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137800082966 0.0737576698707 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278451991912 0.150856017488 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.079302922629 0.0645574589148 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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