The rules that societies expect young people to follow are too strict.
Young people in the 21st century may constantly complain that the society has forced them to act and feel in a certain way. Criticism has correspondingly been raised, claiming that our society has made too many overly strict rules on the youth. Nevertheless, I disagree with this view; considering the consequences of an order-less society, these rules are more than just necessary.
To begin with, parents nowadays have actually given children more freedom in taking control of their own lives and making their own decisions, which represent fewer rules for the teen to obey. My mother sometimes complains to me that my grandfather had always restricted her to do anything he disliked and interfered with her own decisions when she was a young girl, such as telling her not to talk to the boys in school and choose a job that offered the best salary rather than the one she liked the most. However, what was ordinary two decades ago has changed in the societies of the current era, when globalization washes away the traditional, old value and brings in the notion of liberty and independence to the societies. Therefore, comparing to my mother’s experience, I strongly felt that we, as adolescents, are not living under the control of these many strict rules. Since our parents do not put extremely rigid rules on us like our grandparents do, we are able to do much more things than before with less constraint. For instance, we can freely interact with boys and learn how men’s perspective could differ from that of women, or choose a job that we truly enjoy. Either way, it is clear that the rules for the teenagers to follow in our societies are not too strict to follow, especially when the societies have undergone societal changes.
Other than the family factor, in terms of business, many companies in the world do not set up tedious rules for their young employees, due to the fact that the success of a firm today has become more closely associated with the creative sparks of its employees. To free one’s innovative mind, a reduction in the number of restrictions is often necessary. Google’s 20% Time initiative would serve as an excellent illustration, which encourages young Google’s employees to spend 20% of their entire working time on certain projects that have no clear alignment with the corporation’s strategy and their own regular projects. This initiative benefits Google to be more creative and innovative, which are 2 crucial features for a technology company that put great emphasis on its advancement and product design. As a result, many troublesome rules that prevent the youth from begin creative have disappeared naturally.
To sum up, in the current society, both the family and the business are imposing fewer rules to the youth. The former guarantees more choices and freedom while the latter weighs innovation much heavier than the regulation. Therefore, I firmly believe that the rules young people need to follow can hardly be labeled as “strict”, as it is obviously an overstatement if applied to the reality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, while, as for, for instance, such as, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2583.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 511.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05479452055 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91806480291 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549902152642 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 798.3 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.3733766223 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.5 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3888888889 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248202406397 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797730661987 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0996501257977 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172906950044 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0772061048868 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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