the rules of society for young people are strict
In the progressive and sophisticated society where we live, governments adop various laws for young people. There also have been two contrasting attitudes toward this, while some believe that these regulations are hard to obey other adhere to the idea that we need more stricter rules to control our society than past. I support the second perspective. In what follows i will elaborate on my view point.
To begin with, the rate of crimes and violence behavior in most of the societies clearly reveals the we need more strict regulation for controlling youths. Government should control the various kinds of crimes among people by means of some laws to change society toeard a safe place for humans. The Asian society of preserving criminals found that about 70 percent of youths have some ciminal behaviors like brutal murders, savage rape, armed robbery or domestic violence. This example aptly illuminates that current laws are not expedient and adequate for our societies.
Another noteworthy point to be mentioned is that extensive changes in societies during time breed novel predicaments for people and they need complex or strict rules for solving them. Hectice life forec people to adjust themself to many changes by innovative ways which are sometimes dangerous for future generations. To shed light on this matter, i will bring up an example in which i was involved. In the second year of bachelor studies in university we had an assignment related to our psychology class and we should find some deficient laws that extremlly affected youths. We attended in family courts and followd some problems related to custody of children. The resuls revealed that inadequate regulations about parents' resposibilities after mutual diverce is conducive to icreasing the number of children and youths without an independent identity. Since for managing these types of problems we need to have more stricter laws than before.
In brief, contemplating on aforementioned reasons, one can logically draw the conclusion that the current laws not only are not strict but also we need stricter regulation for decreasing numer of crimes in society. All in all. it is highlry recommended that in our complex society, novel occurrences require to solve by adopting firm regulation to gurantee a prosperous life for youths.
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- workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long 70
- people benefit more from travelling in their own country than from travelling to foreign countries 68
- playing computer games is a waste of time. children should not be allowd to play them 73
- the advantage and disadvantage of allocating tax to unhealthy behavior 76
- because modern life is complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, while, in brief, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22580645161 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76092412907 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588709677419 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2461906886 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16666666667 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297581590678 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799663644236 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0938316963339 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173625106621 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467072958451 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.