The school has been funding for students to participate in different types of activities, but this year, due to the lack of money, the school will fund only one activity. Which one should the school fund: sports, arts or volunteering?
As the shrine to guarantee a promising future for youngsters, schools tend to be in great hesitation on distributing really limited financial budget over so many items, such as sports, arts and so on. The issue which program’s fund is expected to be retained if the school experiences financial shortfall has been taken into deliberation by an increasing number of alumnus and admission stuffs. Some are inclined to reserving funds for arts, while others entertain great doubts about it and champion other programs. As far as I am concerned, the fund for sports is to large extent critical to the students.
Above all, sports item plays an irreplaceable role in alleviating students’ psychological pressure. With the fast-paced campus life and proliferation of fierce competition among peers, students these days are awfully hectic, doing sports is supposed to render them an invaluable opportunity to pour out all of the depression and unease. From a student’s perspective, these days they are always busy with tons of academic papers, professional projects as well as all kinds of exam. Sometimes they even need to pull an all-nighter in order to avoid missing the deadlines. However, if the school make use of the fund to improve some exercising facilities like treadmill, they won’t feel burnt out after doing exercises since the physical sports can unwind them by shifting their concentration from work to breathing and muscle building.
In addition to releasing pressure, the students are the absolute beneficiaries from possessing better health condition through working out. Although people may feel exhausted after doing sports, their cardiovascular system can be enhanced, and the blood circulation would be more efficient. Their muscle will also be built up and strengthened. Jack, one of my intimates, is a good case in point. He has been sticking to playing basketball for three semesters day by day. As a result, he registers significantly greater vitality and physical preponderance. Therefore, he also successfully avoids suffering from obesity or high blood pressure.
We cannot deny the importance of the fund for arts and volunteering. If the school invest money on some art or some volunteer opportunities, they can actually broaden their horizon and improve their taste while appreciating the masterpieces of art and acquire some hands-on experience while performing volunteering work. Nevertheless, they are still not able to shift their tightness in the work from relaxation when appreciating the art or volunteering.
Some still advocate for the fund for art or volunteering, when coming to this issue, how can one possibly deprecate the distinct edges above of the physical sports?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, still, then, therefore, well, while, in addition, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2296.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37704918033 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08011946062 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606557377049 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.200837222 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.8 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.35 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239454897331 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0647121894081 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058931990307 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136671981138 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626016416896 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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