Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Parental role has its influence in children`s education. Although some people think that it is not preferable affair to offer money for every high grade. As far as I concerned, it is important to espouse the kids financially for their supremacy in school this is for encouragement and spending the money on school needs, I will analyze these two main areas in my essay.
First of all, the school-age children are always required the encouragement for their high marks. Thus, the parents have great impact on their children during informative school-age. Offering money would be essential to enhance kids educational level. For example, my parents were all time given me money during my school-age , consequently I finished my school in supremacy because I felt that my efforts was evaluated by my parents which in terns encouraged me to compete with other students for high marks .Accordingly, I think that encourage kids by money for high grade is important for a successful educational career.
Secondly, school-age kids are in urgent need for money to buy stationeries and other stuffs. However, a monetary support is crucial to enable them concentrate on their study. My life experience is compelling an example; one of my cousins was not given money from his parents because they thought that money would go for another purpose, this led to inhibit his inspiration and desire in study .whereas another cousin was indulgent and his parent took after him extremely which result in finished his study successfully and became a doctor. Therefore, this is another reason why I acclaimed that monetary support for high marks is an essential.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that financial support is essential .this is because of encouragement of kids to perform their homework well and spending money on what is required on school affairs. I recommend parents to spend money on their children for supremacy and success during informative school-age
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, consequently, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, for example, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1644.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 317.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18611987382 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90810292393 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526813880126 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 103.263207101 48.9658058833 211% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 126.461538462 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3846153846 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5384615385 5.45110844103 212% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376835859801 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158601863229 0.076458572812 207% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655928991273 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258394644424 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040628508082 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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