Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, the rate of studying in schools becomes lesser every day. Personally, I believe that parents should give their kids some money while they get a good score in their class. I think this way for two main reasons which I will explain in the following essay.
Firstly, giving money to young people can result in encouraging them that means it can lead them to become a better student which I mean this can increase the hours that they spend on studying because they know there will be a good prize for them if only they work harder. For instance when I was in the first grade of elementary school my parents provided me some money at the end of the month while I get any good grades at that time, so this inspired me a lot, and as a result I passed that year with mostly A mark in my overall exams, so this can motivated kids a lot.
Secondly, if we give our children money, it makes studying much enjoyable for them in so many aspects which I mean young people will understand that their parents consider their hard work, and they pay attention to them and care for them, so they don't take studying as a compulsory thing in which they should just read and at the end there is nothing that waits for them. For example, my nephew was not a good student until my brother talked to a counselor, and the counselor told him to give my nephew a prize even when he got bad scores, but if he got better ratings, his father had to provide him better rewards. My brother had done it for about two months, and eventually, his child's score got better and better, and he liked to study more every day. As a result, studying becomes a fun task for him.
In conclusion, I think giving kids money after getting high scores not only isn't a bad idea but also is beneficial for them because it can encourage them and make studying pleasurable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, i mean, i think, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1502.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.37900874636 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23634735213 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510204081633 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 104.395450092 48.9658058833 213% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 150.2 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.3 20.6045352989 166% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0 5.45110844103 238% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232803502407 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100512188199 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625216322722 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168947541158 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0647473194641 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.35 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.72 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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