No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of offering money to childeren in return of good performance in shool. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely prefer not to reward in such way to motivate my children. It is my firm believe that stimulating kids and children with money will have devastating long term influence for them for a number of reasons, and I will develope them in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, I think that when children try for better result and high grades in school they gradually miss the main point of lessons and education. In other word the priority for them switch to money instead finding their own way and goal in life. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter, profoundly, affected by my own personal experiences. I remember that when I was a kid I used to dream about my future job as a pilot, but when there was a kind of competition for money between me and my younger brother I always did not think about study more and better for my porpuse. Therefore, as you can see, the money may have some good consiquences in short term period, but it can work the other way around too.
Secondly, when children use to recieve money for their effort they will believe that money worth more than any think else and each time they will ask for more next time. Children should understand and being tought that money is not goal by itself and they cannot evaluate everything by money. Drawing from my own experience, my father used to motivate us by toys or some homemade stuff. Exactly thoes handmade toys made me more excited about technical fields and later helped me to choose the engineering major in university. As it is clear, if i were rewarded with just money instead of thoes toys I would have never discovered my attitude toward engineering. In other words, we should not restricted the positive side of children's mind (like reward for goog grade and marks in school) with money and teach them there are lots of things that worth a lot.
Finally, I have to mention that we should not ommit the money entierly, and beside the method mentioned above we can offer them money too, to prepare them for economical life in future. Actually, the money and other method are two side of a balance scale that we should keep balace by controlling both sides. We should never forget that education, specially for children, is one of most delicate fields that we cannot pay attention just to one aspect and we should see it as whole.
In light of afforementioned reasonsa, I strongly believe that instead of money of at least beside money we can teach children with reward too. In this way, they will be motivated for better performance in schoold and also learn something which will help them in future.
- Because modern life is very complex it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize 73
- Some parents offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea 73
- People work because they need money to live What are some other reasons that people work Discuss one or more of these reasons Use specific examples and details to support your answer 78
- People work because they need money to live What are some other reasons that people work Discuss one or more of these reasons Use specific examples and details to support your answer
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: economic
...fer them money too, to prepare them for economical life in future. Actually, the money and...
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Suggestion: in the future
...oo, to prepare them for economical life in future. Actually, the money and other method a...
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...so learn something which will help them in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, at least, i think, in short, kind of, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2277.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 496.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59072580645 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44670611336 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491935483871 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.0 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.9115135668 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.842105263 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1052631579 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.31578947368 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26060658939 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816422171669 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606405479403 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145989632331 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596971532181 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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