TPO 04 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Without any shadow of doubt, in today's world, cars play an important role in any individual's life. Keeping this fact in mind, some people are of the opinion that the number of cars will decline in the next twenty years; however, some others oppose this issue. Regarding this controversial issue, I personally believe that there will be more cars in use within the twenty years, and these are my justifications:
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that most recently advancement of the technology has made people more lazy. Technology is advancing day by day to bring more convenience to people; hence, various kinds of cars with more luxurious options, different qualities, and wide range of prices are being made. This occurrence has made more people able to afford such a vehicle. To illustrate, my uncle's workplace is far from their house, and he has to drive his own car to go to work every morning. As a result, he has become very sluggish, and he is reluctant to walk or use public transportation even for short distances. As you can see, people's laziness and being inclined to have a car do strongly impact the number of cars in the society.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that people avoid taking public transportation systems due to the health issues. Every day tens and hundreds of people are present in public vehicles at the same time with short a distance from each other. Moreover, if there is an epidemic widespread in the community, this vehicles will be very hazardous, and people will be afraid of using them. Drawing from my own experience, during the covid-19 pandemic, I used to drive to my destination to avoid crowds, and I was afraid of taking a taxi or bus. As a result, even today that the pandemic have been over, I can't use buses or subways.
Taking all above-mentioned arguments into consideration, it can be concluded that as long as people choose their own comfort, and worry about their health, they will continue to use private transport. In other words, not only the number of cars won't decrease in the near future but also it will rise dramatically.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, as to, as a result, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77384196185 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68431510722 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566757493188 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2219960664 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.8 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4666666667 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46666666667 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187340303172 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629389284813 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0414613914331 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116107860968 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0174883786267 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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