Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no doubt that families are busy by their works, since the vast majority of families are dual-income because of the economic burdens. Hence, they do not spend enough time with their children. On the one hand some people believes that children should do leisure activities in this time, while other affirm that the best activity for them is doing their school assignments. It seems that doing entertainment activities are the best practical solution to deal with this issue for a couple of reasons explained in the following.
Firstly, it is crucial for children to create a work/life balance in their life. Because, if children do not have enough entertainment, their efficiency in their education progress would increase. This couple with the lack of family support with them at leisure time, can have dire effect on them. The statistics in Iran demonstrates that the vast majority students who do not emotionally connected with their parents not only have poor performance in their academic achievements, but also have psychological problems such as anxiety.
Another reason is that children whose families are extremely busy with their work have significant problems in social skills, and they cannot positively connect with their peers. Actually, they cannot expand their network of relationship, and this problem would have detrimental effect on the personality growth. As a result, participation in group activities can hopefully help them to enhance their social skills.
Admittedly, children's progression in their academic career is a desire goal for families and this goal can achieve just by putting lots of effort and spending the maximum time for education, nevertheless, children need recreational activities to enhance their mind and boost their mood, especially children who have not emotionally supported by their families.
To conclude, for mentioned reason I strongly believe that spending time on recreational activities such as games and sports is a practical way for children to deal with the lack of family supports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, nevertheless, so, while, no doubt, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1731.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37577639752 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85723231024 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521739130435 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.8488843322 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.153846154 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7692307692 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340194623869 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136902636597 0.076458572812 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0850857054789 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200301018029 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0725001934533 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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