Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live in, human beings have been preoccupied with earning money in order to survive the vicissitudes of life and in that matter, many of them don't have the sufficient time to spend with their children. While many people hold the opinion that parents should dedicate their free time to play fun games or sports with their children, others stand at the other side of the continuum, believing that it is better to spend time on school-related materials. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the former perspective and think that people should be more engaged in focusing in the fun activities when it comes to their children. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that spending time for playing fun games and sports with children will endow them with an improvement in their motor skills. To be more specific, it encourages the children to show their best selves to their parents because it is well proved that children like to see the look in their parents' faces representing being proud of their activities. An example can drive this fact and notion home. While I was young, my brother used to play Chess with my father in the park across the street. I vividly remember that each time, he had this motivation that he wanted him to see his improvement and it was his dream to someday beat him in the match. Having this in mind, he tried really hard to achieve what he always desired and played day and night to get more close to it. Not only he could beat my father after few years passing by, he became a talented Chess player and joined our state's best Chess team. Weren't for my father spending time with him and encouraging him, my brother wouldn't have developed his skills and probably never found out about his potential in being a good player.
Moreover, spending time with children in fun matters can lead to building a strong relationship between the two sides. To put it in other words, children can get enough education and studies while they are at school and there are plenty of professionals to fulfill their needs in practicing for their school materials. However, no one is better than a child's parents in spending time in games and sports. Building a relationship is easy and also long-lasting when it comes to children and can have so many beneficial effects in their souls and in their health situation over all. Receiving enough attention from parents, a child can flourish in lots of ways and it could be a beginning of a great healthy future for him/her. To further illustration, if I ever were to choose a person having so much impact in all my achievements in life, I would choose my parents without a shadow of a doubt. Not only they left me with dozens of great memories to remember, they helped me have a healthy childhood by receiving enough attention.
In conclusion, having all the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I believe that spending time on playing games and sports with children is more beneficial rather than on studying materials. Not only children will improve their motor skills, but also they would make so many good memories and have a great mental and physical situation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, moreover, really, so, well, while, in conclusion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2718.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 573.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74345549738 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89258810929 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58903567497 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495636998255 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 812.7 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.7957889811 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.428571429 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2857142857 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.19047619048 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368135029665 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106046567908 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0868011807995 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2399377002 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0553329626876 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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