Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, parents are busier at working and earning money to support the daily expense. Parents have limited time to spend on their children. In this case, some people think busy parents should spend time having fun with their children, while other agree that parents should do things together which are related to schoolwork. Personally, I will prefer to spend time doing the things related to schoolwork. There are two reasons that I will explore in the following essay.
Fist of all, having parents supervise and help for their children on the homework, children might be more efficient. Every children in the world are afraid of their parents punishment. Under their control, children might boost their potential and be more focus on their schoolwork. My experience is the best illystration of this. When I was in elementary school, my parents only had time of the weekend to spend with me. They always watched me finishing my homeworks and asking me about the school performance in school. Under the supervised of my parents, I not only felt stressful and put more efforts on schoolworks, but also be more efficiently. If I did a terrible works, my mother would punish me, so I just kept focusing on the works so much. I could finish the homeworks two times faster than usual.
Secondly, children might be happier when they are praised by their parents. Parents could parised their child during the time they spend together on the things which are related to schooolwork. The parised might be the fuel of learning of children and having significant influences on their performance. Having these compliments, children might be more hardworking and confident on the schoolworks, because they want to earn their parents approval. In this case, children will be more outstanding in school performance, and keep reaching higher goals. It will provide more benefits than just playing games and sports during the time.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that parents who are really busy should spend their time with children in doing things related with their schoolwork. Children migh be more efficient and pay more attention on homeworks and also keep complete achivements to earn parents compliments.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'work'?
Suggestion: work
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1851.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12742382271 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65941250823 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498614958449 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6288689439 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.1363636364 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4090909091 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95454545455 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375218172886 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122861789027 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120668706501 0.0737576698707 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263142020316 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0942093825737 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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