Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to sc

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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people say that parents should not waste any time in playing games with children, instead they should use this time to teach their children as the present world is very competitive. However, I do not agree with this stance and believe that parents should spend as much time as possible with their children in doing fun stuff for the following three reasons.

First of all, doing fun stuff or playing games will create good memories which is essential for the development of a child. For example, scientists and doctors always suggest the parents that they should spend as much time possible in doing sports because it will help a children to develop their mental strength and make them refreshed. However, if a parents do not perform any fun stuff with their children then the child will be demotivated and their mental growth will decrease. By doing the fun stuff, it is possible to ensure the necessary growth of a children which is more important than studying.

Second of all, if the parents spends their time with the children in doing schoolwork then the child will be demotivated and can sometime stops studying at all. For example, in the present time, a children spends a lot of time in studying at school and if they are forced to study again with their parents after coming home, then it can have a negative impact on them. Recent studies have found that the best way to motivate a child to study at school is by doing fun stuff and playing game when they return home. So, at home, it is the responsibility of the parents to entertain their child so that they can study well at school.

For the above three reasons, I strongly believe that parents should spend their time with their child in doing fun stuff so that they can become refreshed, motived to study well in school.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 270, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
...le in doing sports because it will help a children to develop their mental strength and ma...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 351, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a parent' or simply 'parents'?
Suggestion: a parent; parents
...th and make them refreshed. However, if a parents do not perform any fun stuff with their...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 557, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
...sible to ensure the necessary growth of a children which is more important than studying. ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 196, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
... all. For example, in the present time, a children spends a lot of time in studying at sch...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, then, well, for example, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1483.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66352201258 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28508188578 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 212.727598566 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.430817610063 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 423.9 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 32.9387109293 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.818181818 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9090909091 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27272727273 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394619708671 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177275598897 0.076458572812 232% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0792703477359 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267510494895 0.150856017488 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.070347270234 0.0645574589148 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.44 58.1214874552 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.34 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 86.8835125448 43% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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